Thus far in our discussion we have considered
grouping done by commas only, except incidentally
in Sentences 6, 6-2, 7, 7-1, and 7-2. We shall
now consider the application of our fundamental
principle to grouping that requires the semicolon and
the colon.
Our first illustrative sentence (No. 20) is from a
distinguished writer, noted for the “infinite care he
gives to his diction.” We think the sentence decidedly
distracting:
20. I have an arrangement to do a serial for Harper’s,
and a series of wayside pieces for Scribner’s, Smith illustrating,
is on the tapis.
Probably very few persons, in reading the above
sentence at sight, would take notice from the first
comma that the sentence is here divided into two
shorter sentences (the grammarians call these sentence-parts
clauses). In the absence of such notice,
the reader goes on to “is” before discovering the real
relation of the group of words following “and.” The
comma before “and” does not clearly show that
“and” connects the two larger groups of the sentence,
and so gives notice to the reader that the first group,
which is one of the clauses, is complete; nor, in the
absence of such notice, is the reader told that the
words immediately following “and” look forward,
instead of backward, for their completion as a group.
The confusion or uncertainty of grouping is here
further increased by the character of the two groups
between which “and” appears to stand. Each begins
with the same word (a), thus making them appear
to be coördinate groups; and each group appears
to be the object of “do.”
Perhaps the author would contend that the comma
before “and” is sufficient to give notice of the proper
grouping, just as we used a comma for a somewhat
similar grouping in Sentence 1-1. Such contention
would not be without merit; but Sentence 1-1 is
much shorter, and the consequent liability to make
the wrong grouping is much less. Our discussion
might thus end in a difference of opinion without
determining the degree of separation requiring a
mark of higher rank than the comma. The discussion
could be opened by an admission on our part
that a semicolon in No. 1-1 would be better than the
comma; for its warning of the change of grouping
would be unmistakable by any reader.
Two reasons may be given for the use of the comma
in No. 1-1, instead of the semicolon; and we give
them in order to emphasize the fact that we cannot
always have in language one degree of separation
that calls unmistakably for the comma, and another
degree that calls unmistakably for the semicolon.
The reasons for the use of the comma in No. 1-1 are
as follows:
1. As the sentence is very short, the eye readily
catches the relation requiring the grouping that carries
“their mothers” forward for its connection, instead of
backward to “children.”
2. The use of a semicolon in this sentence might
seem to justify a rule requiring a semicolon in every
sentence composed of two clauses, while convention
hardly justifies such punctuation. On the other
hand, if we prefer the use of the semicolon in No. 1-1,
under what conditions would the comma be preferred?
If what immediately follows the conjunction
between any two clauses, especially short ones, does
not suggest connection with what precedes, a comma
before the conjunction gives sufficient notice of the
grouping of the language into two clauses.
Thus we have forced upon us, at least apparently,
the necessity of making choice in many sentences
between the comma and the semicolon. The problem
is further complicated by the need of the different
classes of readers for whom the marks in language are
used, and still further by convention.
The proper punctuation of No. 20 is as follows:
20-1. I have an arrangement to do a serial for
Harper’s; and a series of wayside pieces for Scribner’s,
Smith illustrating, is on the tapis.
Our next sentence is particularly interesting because
of its character and its source. It is from a
book by a distinguished literary man, who is the
professor of English in one of our leading universities
and the author of a text-book on English composition.
The book from which the sentence is taken was
printed at The Riverside Press, which has long been
considered by many to be the best printing-office in
the world:
21. The deliberate good sense with which Franklin
treated matters of religion and morality, he displayed
equally in his scientific writings; and, a little later, in his
public documents and correspondence,4 which made him
as eminent in diplomacy and statecraft as he had earlier
been in science and in local affairs.
In No. 20-1 we use a semicolon expressly to show
that what immediately follows the mark looks forward
for its connection; and, it seems to us, the semicolon
in No. 21 cannot fail to give to any reader, with
or without much knowledge of marks, notice that a
complete new group, and not an additional part of the
preceding group, is to follow the semicolon. If the
reader is looking forward for a new group (a clause),
the ending of the sentence gives him a surprise, and
compels him to read over the entire sentence to make
the proper grouping.
It is difficult to say just what notice a comma
before “and” in Sentence 21 would give most readers.
Let us so punctuate it, and challenge the comma.
What will its answer be? This, of course, is a
question that the reader puts to himself, testing his
own knowledge of the marks. In the light of our
discussion of Sentence 1, the comma might seem to say
that “and” does not connect “writings” with some
noun to follow. We shall see, later in our discussion,
that a comma may be necessary in a grouping almost
like this; but in this sentence the reader has another
aid, in fact two others, thus making the comma unnecessary,
if not objectionable. The word “equally,”
which comes before “in his scientific writings,” raises
the expectation of a similar group to follow and to be
introduced by a suitable connecting word. As “and”
is such a word, the absence of a mark of punctuation
before it at once suggests that a like group is to follow.
The second aid to the reader in the process of grouping
is the word “in,” which introduces each of the groups
connected by “and,” and identifies the second group
as the coördinate of the first.
We punctuate to aid the reader quickly to grasp
through the eye the groupings of printed language, and
to enable him to determine the relations between the
groups thus formed. When a mark is not needed for
this purpose, it may be omitted.
If we say the man is in a bad state of mind and in
an equally bad state of body, the eye catches the words
“and” and “in,” at the end of the line, practically at
the same instant. The “in” tells of the grouping so
distinctly that a comma is not needed to inform the
reader that no word follows “and” to be connected by
it to “mind.” Therefore we say, when groups are so
similarly formed that the word following the conjunction
gives ample notice of the grouping, a comma
is not needed. We shall consider this point
more fully in another place.
By a slight change in the wording of No. 21, we
get a counterpart of the illustrative grouping just
given:
21-1. He displayed good judgment in his scientific
writings and in his public documents.
The grouping here is so unmistakable as to make
a comma before “and” quite objectionable. It is
unmistakable because of the like formation of the
groups, and also because of the absence of any word
after “and” that suggests a wrong relation to what
precedes.
Now, if we do introduce a word or two between
“and” and “in,” and such words do not suggest relation
to what precedes, we may still omit the comma
before “and.” This reasoning, with that above,
suggests the best punctuation of No. 21, which is as
follows:
21-2. The deliberate good sense with which Franklin
treated matters of religion and morality, he displayed
equally in his scientific writings and, a little later, in his
public documents and correspondence, which made him
as eminent in diplomacy and statecraft as he had earlier
been in science and local affairs.
Thus we find no need of any mark before “and”
in this sentence, where a painstaking writer uses a
semicolon.
As “and,” even in No. 21-1, does not connect
“writings” with “documents,” but connects the two
groups of words beginning with “in,” the adjective
clause in No. 21-2 beginning with “which” can
hardly go over into the first group, and there find a
noun which it may seem to modify.
To illustrate how puzzling a rule may be, and
how wrong, we quote the following rule from Mr.
Wilson’s work (page 113):
When a sentence consists of three or more clauses,
united by a conjunction, none of which are susceptible
of division, a semicolon should be put between those
which are least connected in sense, and a comma only
between the others.
To illustrate this rule, the following sentence is
given in Mr. Wilson’s book (the italics are ours):
22. The woods may disappear, but the spirit of them
never will now; for it has been felt by a poet, and we can
feel for ever5 what he felt.
Does the punctuation indicate the real sense relations
in this sentence? We think not. The semicolon
before “for” divides the sentence into two
parts; but what follows the semicolon is clearly not
in the for relation with all that precedes it, as it
should be if the sentence is divided into two parts at
this point. The sense relation expressed by “for”
is unmistakably between all that follows it and what
precedes it back to “but.”
The real division of the sentence into two parts is
made at “but,” as shown in the following:
22-1. The woods may disappear, but the spirit of
them never will now.
Expanding the above, to emphasize the relations,
but still maintaining the sense of No. 22, we get the
following:
22-2. The woods may disappear, for they are material
and will decay; but the spirit of them never will now,
for it has been felt by a poet and we can feel forever what
he felt.
In No. 22-2 we added a commonplace modifier
to the first statement in the sentence, in order to
exhibit more clearly the similar relation between two
like groups in the second part of the sentence, which
take a semicolon in the quoted sentence (No. 22).
Punctuated so as to show the real sense relations,
the sentence reads as follows:
22-3. The woods may disappear: but the spirit of
them never will now; for it has been felt by a poet, and we
can feel forever what he felt.
A thorough comprehension of the groupings in
these sentences, which is based upon sense relations,
will illuminate the punctuation already discussed.
It will also explain some apparent, if not real, inconsistencies
that are inevitable in dealing with marks
to express indefinite degrees of relation.
Sentence 1 is composed of two clauses connected
by a conjunction, as is also Sentence 22-1. The
liability to error in grouping Sentence 1 may be sufficient
to require a semicolon; but the grouping in
Sentence 22-1 is so unmistakable that a comma is
sufficient to give notice of a change in the direction of
the thought. In Sentence 21 the semicolon gives notice
of a grouping which does not follow. In Sentence 22
the grouping by punctuation does not follow the
meaning of the language, and is therefore wrong.
Wrong grouping is perhaps most common in
sentences containing groups requiring coördinate conjunctions,
such as “and” and “but.” Quite often
such sentences cannot be so punctuated as to show
the correct grouping by the marks. The following
sentence is an example:
23. The Society has expelled two of its members for
unprofessional conduct, and has investigated complaints
against two other members, but it has been unable to
obtain enough evidence to convict them.
This is not bad punctuation, for it conveys the
meaning, which, however, is not difficult to obtain;
but it is not good punctuation, for the marks do not
group the words in accordance with the sense relations
that exist between the groups.
If the sentence were divided into two parts by
“but,” the but relation would exist between what
follows and each of the groups of words coördinated
by the conjunction “and.” Thus we would say, “The
Society has expelled four of its members for unprofessional
conduct, but has been unable to obtain enough
evidence to convict them.” As this relation does not
make sense, we know that the “but” relation exists
between what follows it and what precedes it back
to “and.” As the but relation does not extend beyond
“and,” this fact should be shown by the mark, thus
requiring a larger mark (semicolon) before “and.”
But a semicolon before “and” would separate two
closely connected groups (predicates),—“has expelled”
and “has investigated.” It would also connect the
second group with the third, making one larger group
in the and relation with the first.
As the sense relations here require a grouping
inconsistent with the grammatical relations, a change
in the language becomes necessary before it can be
properly punctuated:
23-1. The Society has expelled two of its members
for unprofessional conduct; and it has investigated complaints
against two other members, but has been unable
to obtain enough evidence to convict them.
The insertion of “it” (a new subject) after “and,”
and its omission after “but,” with the proper use of
the semicolon, make clear the two things done by
the Society, and make this clear by the proper
grouping of words to show the unmistakable thought-grouping.
If we are required to punctuate language which
we are not permitted to change, our punctuation may
have to depart from our system, whether established
by rule or by reason. A study of such punctuation
will lead to a nice discrimination in both marks
and relations. Our next sentence, with its different
modes of punctuation, will illustrate the point. The
sentence is given in three forms: (1) as it appeared in
a literary journal; (2) as it is printed in the Common
Version of the New Testament (2 Timothy i, 16);
and (3) as it is printed in the Revised Version. We
shall, however, not follow its division into two verses,
as it appears in the Common Version of the Bible:
24. The Lord give mercy unto the house of Onesiphorus;
for he oft refreshed me, and was not ashamed of my
chain; but, when he was in Rome, he sought me out
diligently, and found me.
24-1. The Lord give mercy unto the house of Onesiphorus;
for he oft refreshed me, and was not ashamed
of my chain: but, when he was in Rome, he sought me out
very diligently, and found me.
24-2. The Lord grant mercy unto the house of
Onesiphorus: for he oft refreshed me, and was not
ashamed of my chain; but, when he was in Rome, he
sought me out diligently, and found me.
In each of these three sentences the punctuation
divides the language into three larger groups of words,
two of which are subdivided by commas. In the
second and third a colon indicates a second grouping
of each sentence into two main parts, but not at the
same point. If the semicolons and the colons were
challenged for their meanings, the answers would
show an interesting variety of grouping of words, as
well as a variety of sense relations. Such a variety
of punctuation is common only because the actual
significance of marks, in their grouping and relational
effects, has not been considered.
These sentences present the same problem, though
somewhat further complicated, that was presented
by Nos. 22 and 23. We have only to ask ourselves
how far the but, for, and and relations extend. Do the
marks so group the words as to indicate the sense
relations by the grouping? Of course they do not,
as is shown by the difference in the groupings. In No.
24 neither semicolon shows how far the for or the
but relation extends; and therefore neither mark is
an efficient sign-board. If challenged for a meaning,
neither could give the reader an intelligent answer.
In each of Nos. 24-1 and 24-2 the colon makes
another grouping, dividing each sentence into two still
larger groups. Here each mark would give a definite
answer to a challenge; but both answers could not be
correct. The sentence is unmistakably divided into
two parts, the first part ending with “Onesiphorus.”
Mercy is sought for him because of what he did; and
what he did is specified in the language that follows
“for.” The extent of the for relation, therefore, must
be shown by the mark. A colon will clearly show that
it goes to the end of the sentence, as a like relation
was shown by the colon in No. 6-2.
We now have to deal with the proper grouping of
all that follows “for”; but we cannot use a colon for
this purpose because, having been used once, a second
colon in the same sentence would confuse the whole
grouping. We thus come to a serious difficulty,
which arises out of the number of groups to be made
with the marks (comma and semicolon) left at our
disposal. This difficulty would be even greater in
No. 24-2 had we quoted the sentence in full, the
complete verse containing another clause. In the
second of the two larger groups we have an and and a
but relation exactly like the and and but relations in
No. 23, which we could not indicate by marks. As
we may not change the language of the sentence
under consideration, we must punctuate it with as
little violence to the meanings of marks as possible.
Probably the clearest punctuation of the sentence
would be as follows:
24-3. The Lord grant mercy unto the house of
Onesiphorus; for he oft refreshed me, and was not ashamed
of my chain, but, when he was in Rome, he sought me
very diligently, and found me.
As the sentence is thus divided into two main
parts, with only commas in one part, the semicolon
is sufficient to mark the larger groups. As the comma
before “but” does not suggest to the reader how far
back the but relation extends, he is left to ascertain
it without the aid of a mark definitely pointing it out.
We do not claim this to be good punctuation, but
we think it the best the sentence will permit. The
sentence seems to show the fault of bad grouping.
If we are ever in doubt as to how far back a relation,
indicated or to be indicated by a mark before
the conjunction, extends, we can easily determine
this by forming the relation between the words apparently
thus connected. Take, for instance, Sentence
24. The for relation between “give mercy” and
“was not ashamed” is just as evident as the for relation
between “give mercy” and “he oft refreshed me.”
We can say “give mercy, for he oft refreshed me” and
“give mercy, for he was not ashamed.”
Let us attempt to make a like grouping to determine
how far back the but relation extends. It appears
to extend to the two preceding groups, which,
being connected by “and” and put between two semicolons,
constitute one group. This would give us
“was not ashamed, but sought me” and6 “refreshed
me, but sought me.” The sense, of course, shows
that the second group is not a proper group.
A writer, as we shall see later, should always
guard against using a conjunction between words or
groups of words not bearing to each other the relation
indicated by such conjunction. Much confusion in
punctuation arises from an effort to indicate by the
use of marks relations that are not sense relations,
as in the sentences just considered.
A somewhat different, but even more effective,
grouping is shown by another use of the colon; but,
very singularly, practically all writers on punctuation
seem to ignore this use. Before considering it, we
shall take up the colon’s conventional use, which is
that of the “formal” introduction of any matter,
such as particulars, a speech, or a quotation:
25. I purchased the following articles: one dozen
pens, one ream of paper, and one box of envelopes.
25-1. The speaker arose, and addressed the audience
as follows:
“The occasion which brings us together,” etc.
25-2. The speaker said: “The occasion which brings
us together,” etc.
It is difficult to find a reason for this use of the
colon, inasmuch as what follows the colon in any of
the above sentences, is not a “limb” of the sentence.
The relation in No. 25 is clearly that of apposition;
and it is the same in Nos. 25-1 and 25-2. In the
latter the apposition is between some word not
expressed, but understood, and what follows,—for
example, “addressed the audience in language such
as follows,” “the speaker said these things.”
We have called this the “conventional” use because
it has become the accepted punctuation. We
introduce it here in order to show that this same relation
(apposition) governs in a frequent use of this mark
which is not explained by the writers on punctuation.
Before passing to this use of the colon, let us make
sure that the meaning of “formal introduction” is
quite clear to us. It means that the matter following
the colon is announced or suggested in a manner somewhat
similar to the announcement made in the words
viz., as follows, etc. It thus implies that the matter
is introduced according to a form. “He said,” followed
by a colon, is one of the usual conventional
forms; but he said that is not so considered, and no
mark at all follows “said.”
We use a colon throughout this work at the end
of the line preceding an example if the example illustrates
what precedes. This use of the colon ties the
example to what precedes. See the colon preceding
Sentence 25, above.
It is also to be noted that the colon loses, in this
formal and conventional use, its relative value, that is,
its rank above the comma and the semicolon. Thus
it often appears in only one or in both of the semicolon-divided
groups of a sentence:
25-3. In a bill of exchange there are three original
parties: drawer, drawee, and payee; in a promissory note,
only two parties: the maker and the payee.
Here we see that the colons are used to group
each one of the two parts into which the sentence
is divided by a semicolon. We shall show later
(Sentence 33) what we consider a much better mode
of punctuating such sentences, and thus avoiding the
appearance of making the colon subordinate to the
semicolon.
We are here seeking to exhibit the relation of
apposition. When words or groups of words stand
in this relation, the second word or group expresses
in another form what is expressed in the first word or
group of words. In No. 25 what follows the colon
is the same as “articles,” which precedes it. If the
word “articles” were omitted, the colon would still
be used, “articles” or a like word being understood,
as some word is understood in Nos. 25-1 and 25-2.
The same relation is shown in Sentence 32-2 by means
of parentheses.
With this understanding of the relation between
groups separated by the colon, our next illustrative
sentence is particularly interesting, not only because
of its character, but because of its source. As
punctuated, it fails to show a nice meaning in language
which is quite easily overlooked in the absence of the
proper distinguishing mark; and it is from a letter
by Thomas Bailey Aldrich in reply to one, from a
friend, which he could not decipher. It appears in
the foremost printers’ magazine in the country, a
magazine that often discusses the subject of punctuation:
26. There is a singular and a perpetual charm in a
letter of yours; it never grows old; it never loses its novelty.
The use of two semicolons, dividing this sentence
into three clauses, signifies that these clauses are in
like relation to each other,—that is, that they are
coördinate in sense. If the and or the or relation exists
between the first and second clauses, it must exist
between the second and third, just as it exists between
the three items named in the second part of No. 25.
A very slight examination of the meaning of the
language of this sentence shows that the clauses are
not coördinate in sense, although such coördination
is indicated by the use of the same mark between
them.
The relation between the second and third clauses
is exhibited in the following:
26-1. It never grows old; and it never loses its
novelty.
We cannot unite the first and second clauses
in this way, and retain the real meaning of the language;
nor have we, thus far in our study, found a
meaning of the semicolon that would give the reader
notice of the relation between the first clause of No.
26 and what follows. The second and third clauses
of this sentence are as plainly explanatory of the first
clause as are the items that follow the colon in No. 25
explanatory of “articles.” A change in the wording
of the sentence will show that it is exactly similar in
its relation to No. 25:
26-2. Your letter possesses the following singular
and perpetual charms: youthfulness and novelty.
If this relation exists between the principal
thought and the detailed items, then we may indicate
it by the colon, thus dividing the sentence into two
groups with the relation of apposition between them:
26-3. There is a singular and a perpetual charm in
a letter of yours: it never grows old; it never loses its
novelty.
Let us note how carefully language is used in this
sentence: the letter possesses a singular charm (it
never loses its novelty) and a perpetual charm (it
never grows old).
The colon both groups the language and shows the
relation (apposition) between the two main groups.
On the other hand, the semicolon in this sentence
stands where the sense relation is the and relation.
It is not quite proper to say that the second and
third clauses are explanatory simply of “charm”:
they are explanatory of the entire first clause, repeating
and expanding the thought expressed in that
clause, just as what follows the colon in the sentence
we are writing explains what precedes.
Our next illustrative sentence is from one of
Howell’s novels, which was printed at The Riverside
Press. It has the fault of No. 26, and the added
fault of an indefinite but relation:
27. He was not candid; he did not shun concealments
and evasions; but positive lies he had kept from.
The second clause is clearly explanatory of the
first; and the third clause simply modifies the second
by showing the degree of untruthfulness of the man.
With the new meaning of the colon we are now
considering, a colon after “candid” informs the reader
of the relation between the main groups of the sentence:
27-1. He was not candid: he did not shun concealments
and evasions; but positive lies he had kept from.
So far as the mere grouping is concerned, this
could be done in Nos. 26 and 27 by a semicolon and
a comma in each; but the semicolon would not inform
the reader of the true relation between the two larger
groups. The colon would still be required if the next
two groups took a comma, or even no mark, between
them.
We called this relation that of apposition. We
might say, somewhat more specifically, that the second
group is an amplification in language to express an
extension of the idea, or to fortify the image, of the
first group. This purpose may also be accomplished
by a contrast between the ideas expressed in the two
groups.
The writer on punctuation who says, as do many
such writers, that the colon is an obsolete mark,
except in its formal use for enumeration, does so, we
believe, in ignorance of the useful and beautiful purpose
it performs in a very large class of sentences.
EXAMPLES
1. There is purpose in pain; otherwise it were
devilish.
2. But not thieves; nor robbers; nor mobs;
nor rioters, insurgents, or rebels.
3. The people’s voice is odd; it is, and it is not,
the voice of God.
4. He cared little for poetry; fact, and not fancy,
satisfied him.
5. The second Folio, reprinted from the first,
was published in 1632; the third Folio, in 1664; and
the fourth, in 1685.
6. Wealth has greatly accumulated; machinery
has come to do a large part of our work; and all sorts
of people have more or less leisure on their hands.
7. Render therefore to all their dues: tribute to
whom tribute is due; custom to whom custom; fear
to whom fear; honor to whom honor.
8. The evils are very real, grave, and widespread;
whether a trifle more or less so than these rough
estimates make out, is of small account.
9. His condition was not toxic; for he had never
been a worker in paints, minerals, or other poisonous
substances, and he did not use alcohol or tobacco.
10. There is no roughness in his manners, although
he has certainly not been brought up to the
ways of what is generally known as good society; and
his smile is winning and sweet.
11. His fidelity was unconditional, unobtrusive,
uncomplaining; he was willing to give much and
receive little; he consented even to be forgotten,
while he never forgot.
12. “I lived with words,” Mr. Stevenson says;
and the result is that formal excellence to which
we have now grown accustomed, but which dazzled
our judgment at the outset.
13. The order leaves only a few hundred places,
below those filled by Presidential appointment and
Senatorial confirmation and above the grade of
laborers and scullions, for the politicians to quarrel
over.
14. Sin and misery appealed most strongly to
Holmes, but he invariably saw hope; and despair,
that stalks through life making a tragedy of the
common event to break the universal heart, had no
claim upon his pen.
15. Turner’s studies of Carthage represent the
death that attends the vain pursuit of wealth; his
studies of Rome, the death that attends the vain
pursuit of power; his studies of Venice, the death that
attends the vain pursuit of beauty.
16. The Scotchman of the world, the gay puritan,
insists upon the few articles of his belief when he is
openly preaching, as in “A Christmas Sermon”; or
covertly preaching, as in “Old Mortality”; or sketching
and traveling, as with a donkey.
17. Ruskin says that in a kindly and well-bred
society, if anybody tries to please them, they try to
be pleased; if anybody tries to astonish them, they
have the courtesy to be astonished; if people become
tiresome, they ask somebody to sing or play: but
they do not criticise.
18. Such a household as that of Zacharias and
Elizabeth would have all that was beautiful in the
religion of the time: devotion towards God; a home
of affection and purity; reverence towards all that
was sacred in things divine and human; ungrudging,
self-denying, loving charity to the poor; the tenderest
regard for the feelings of others, so as not to raise a
blush, nor to wound their hearts; above all, intense
faith and hope in the higher and better future of
Israel.
19. I laid me down and slept; I awaked; for the
Lord sustained me.
As the for relation is here unmistakable, it should be made
so at a glance in the punctuation by the use of a comma before
“for” or by a colon after “slept.”
20. The cow and the bear shall feed; their young
ones shall lie down together: and the lion shall eat
straw like the ox.
The above is the punctuation of the Common Version of
Isaiah xi, 7. The American Revised Version uses a semicolon
instead of the colon, thus making a series of the three groups of
words. We think the latter poor punctuation, because the first
and second groups form one picture, and the third group forms
another. The two pictures are revealed by the use of the semicolon
and the colon; and intelligently to read the verse aloud
requires a shorter pause at the semicolon than at the colon. The
two pictures are clearly indicated by “feeding” in one group,
and “eating” in the other.
21. Virtue and wisdom are an up-hill road, where
people do not advance without some effort; folly and
vice, a down-hill path, where it requires some effort
not to advance.
22. The custom of exchanging presents on a
certain day in the year is a fine thing or a foolish
thing, as the case may be; an encouragement to friendliness,
or a tribute to fashion; an expression of good
nature, or a bid for favor; an outgoing of generosity,
or a guise of greed; a cheerful old custom, or a futile
old farce, according to the spirit and the form which
it takes.
This sentence, from a well-known writer, is poorly punctuated,
and has another fault, which will be revealed by an effort
to punctuate the group of words following “farce” so as to
show to what it belongs.
The omission of a comma before the first “or” is proper;
the use of one before each following “or” is unnecessary.
“A fine thing” and “a foolish thing” are general terms,
and are followed by four illustrations in alternative groups,—for
instance, “an encouragement to friendliness” is “a fine
thing,” and “a tribute to fashion” is “a foolish thing.” This
sense relation requires a colon after “be.”
“According to the spirit and the form which it takes” belongs
to each semicolon group following the colon; and, moreover,
it is a mere duplication in sense of “as the case may be.”
It is difficult, by punctuation, unmistakably to separate this
group from exclusive modification of the group it follows, and
thus tie it to the four groups, where it seems to belong.
The substitution of “according to the spirit and the form
it takes” for “as the case may be,” would convey, it seems to us,
the author’s full meaning. With the omission of commas as
suggested, this would give the following:
22-1. The custom of exchanging presents on a
certain day in the year is a fine thing or a foolish
thing, according to the spirit and the form which it
takes: an encouragement to friendliness or a tribute
to fashion; an expression of good nature or a bid for
favor; an outgoing of generosity or a guise of greed;
a cheerful old custom or a futile old farce.
23. The philosophical elements of his work are
not especially profound or novel; its descriptive merits
are considerable; but its deficiencies as an orderly and
inclusive narrative are, to say the least, perplexing.
The sense relations between the three clauses of the above
sentence are not properly expressed by its conjunctions, “and”
(understood) and “but.” The incongruity of the and relation
becomes apparent upon reading the first and second clauses
with “and” between them. The use of two semicolons in the
sentence renders the “but” relation indeterminate.
The sentence needs to be recast, which may be done as
follows:
23-1. The philosophical elements of his work are
not especially profound or novel; and, although its
descriptive merits are considerable, its deficiencies as
an orderly and inclusive narrative are, to say the
least, perplexing.
24. Amateurs in literary composition soon acquire
the bad habit of writing carelessly; they spell strange
names in two or more different ways; they form
capital letters, and even the small lower-case letters,
so obscurely that one word may be mistaken for
another; they have no clearly defined system, or at
least observe none, for the proper placing of capitals,
italic, and the marks of punctuation.
The above sentence is from the preface of what is probably
the most complete work on composition written in recent years.
A preceding sentence contains the statement that our high
schools do not “thoroughly teach the correct expression of
thought in writing.”
In view of this charge against our high schools, and because
the sentence under consideration is itself a type of careless
construction, very common among even good writers, the
sentence becomes interesting. It is divided by semicolons into
four clauses, apparently in a series; but an analysis of the meaning
of the language will show that the four clauses do not constitute
a series.
Four charges against amateurs are made in the sentence,
in brief, as follows:
1. Writing carelessly.
2. Spelling names differently.
3. Forming letters obscurely.
4. Possessing, or observing, no system in the use of capitals,
italics, and marks of punctuation.
If these four faults form a series, what does “writing carelessly”
mean? To spell a word in different ways, to form letters
obscurely, or to observe no system in the use of capitals, etc., is
“writing carelessly.” In short, the first term of the four is a
general statement, of which the three terms that follow are details.
This fact should be shown by the punctuation.
A colon after the first clause will show its relation to what
follows.