All writing—except mere exercise and what the author
intends for himself alone—is a problem in strategy. The
successful author will always regard his writing as a problem
of manipulation of material wisely chosen to accomplish an
objective against the enemy. The enemy is the reader.
He is armed with two terrible weapons, lack of interest and
lack of comprehension. Sometimes one weapon is stronger
than the other, but a wise author always has an eye for both.
The strategic problem is, then, so to choose material, and so
to order and express it, that the reader will be forced to become
interested, to comprehend, to arrive, in other words,
at the point in his feeling and thinking to which the author
wishes to lead him. The author's objective is always an
effect in the reader's mind. In so far as the author creates
this effect he is successful. And the time to consider the
effect, to make sure of its accomplishment, is before the
pen touches the paper.
Sometimes the author makes a mistake in his planning, as
did the composer Handel when he wrote the oratorio of
"The Messiah." He placed the "Hallelujah Chorus" at the
end of the oratorio. But when, toward the end of the second
section, he saw from his place on the stage that the audience
was not so enthusiastic as he had expected it to be at that
point, he changed his plan, with practical shrewdness rushed
to the front and shifted the famous chorus from the end of
the third section to the end of the second, and had the satisfaction
of seeing the audience so moved that first the King
rose, and then, of course, the audience with him. The chorus
has stood at the end of the second part to this day; that is
the place for it—it brings about the effect that Handel desired
much better there than if it were saved for the end of
the oratorio. The oratorio is, in other words, a greater work
than it would have been had not the author kept a keen eye
for the audience, for the effect, and a willingness to change
his plans whenever the gaining of the effect required a change.
Just so the writer should constantly scan the horizon of the
reader's mind for signs of interest and for shafts of intelligence.
The effect that the writer desires in the reader's mind may
be of different natures. In Baedeker's Guide-Book the aim
is largely to satisfy the understanding, to meet the reader's
desire for compact information. In some of Poe's tales the
effect is of horror. Patrick Henry aimed primarily to rouse
to vigorous action. Shakespeare wished to shed light upon
the great truths of existence, to satisfy the reader's groping
curiosity, and also to thrill the reader with pity and terror
or with high good humor or the unrestrained laughter of
roaring delight.
In so far as the author accomplishes his purpose, in just so
far he is successful. When friends complimented Cicero,
telling him that he was the greatest orator, he replied somewhat
as follows: "Not so, for when I give an oration in the
Forum people say, 'How well he speaks!' but when Demosthenes
addressed the people they rose and shouted, 'Come,
let us up and fight the Macedonians!'" If Cicero was correct
in his estimate, Demosthenes was the greater orator—of
that there can be no doubt—for he gained his effect.
President Wilson's great war messages had as one of their objects,
certainly, the rousing in American hearts of a high
thrill to the lofty object for which they fought, the overcoming
of might with right. The remarkable success of the messages
attests the author's power.
Now the author will accomplish this effect in the reader's
mind only if his writing "takes hold," and it will "take
hold" only if it is weighty, that is, only if it bears toward the
desired end in every part and in every implication. This is
as true in writings that aim at light, frivolous effects as in
those that stir the deeper emotions, in writing that aims at
the understanding almost alone as in that which strives not
only to make clear but to infuse with deathless appeal to the
heart. A treatise on the fourth dimension must bear, in
every stroke, toward the complete satisfaction of the reader's
intellectual curiosity; a comedy must lay down each word in
the intention of liberating the silver laughter of humor; a
tragedy must leave us in every implication serious, even in
its introduction of comical material to heighten the tragic
nature of the whole. To make every word bear in the one
general direction—that is the writer's task. In no other
way can he move the reader's mind and heart as he wishes to.
An author finds, however, that to gain the desired effect
requires skillful manipulation on his part. He confronts
a mass of refractory material, often full of contradictions,
in which any potential effect seems almost as difficult to discover
as the proverbial needle in the well-known haystack.
For example, when a historian sits down, one hundred years
hence, to the task of explaining the Great War, he will be
confronted with an amazing welter of endless facts, tendencies,
personal, national, and racial ambitions, enmities,
competitions in trade, language, customs, indiscretions of
diplomats, inscrutable moves of controlling powers, checks
and counter checks, assertion and denial, accusation and assurance
of innocence, bribery and plots and spy systems,
amateur comment in newspaper and magazine, defenses by
people who have retained their poise and other defenses by
those whose faculties have been unseated by the awful strain
of war—and everywhere he will find the endless array of
events and detailed facts of organization of civil and military
life to mold somehow into a consistent, intelligible whole.
Well may he say that the task is too great for mortal man.
Yet somehow the history is to be written, somehow the
effect that he wishes is to be gained. Obviously the great
prime task is to unify, to bring order out of chaos, to create
from formless material a real edifice of thought. Exactly
the same task awaits the writer of any kind of literature; in
a short theme no less, the first great duty is to find some
principle whereby the author can exclude the useless and
include what is of value.
The first question to ask is—and it is also the last and
the intervening question—"What am I trying to accomplish?"
At first thought this question may seem the most
obvious, the most elementary, and the least helpful query
possible. But upon its being successfully met depends the
whole success of the writing, whether of choosing or ordering
or proportioning the material, or of expressing the selected
ideas. For, since the chief task before the writer is to make
his thoughts and his expression drive in one direction, so
that the whole composition is simplified in the reader's mind,
is unified and given an organic existence, even the choice of
words, upon which depends so much of the tone of the composition,
is largely settled by the answer to this question of
what the author hopes to accomplish.
In Exposition, the explaining the relations among things
and ideas, we are commonly told that we must "cover the
ground," must "stick to the subject," must "include whatever
is valuable and reject the rest." But such directions are
insufficient. Until I have some touchstone, some applicable
standard, I cannot tell whether material is valuable or not.
It is as if one were brought into the presence of multifarious
building material,—wood both hard and soft, cement and
the other ingredients of concrete, bricks, stucco, and steel
beams, and terra cotta tiles,—and then were requested to
build a house, using whatever of the material might be of
value, and removing the rest. The builder would be nonplussed.
He cannot build, now with wood, now with stone,
and again with tile; if he did, the saying would be all too true,
"There's no place like home!" He can do nothing reasonable
until he has been informed as to the kind of house desired,
until he is given a principle of selection. Then, if he
has been bidden to make a brick house, he at once knows what
his object is, and can then reject whatever does not help him,
in the accomplishment. In the same way, if I am asked to
write five thousand words about Horticulture, I am at a loss
to choose from the history of the science, or the present status,
or the still unsolved problems, or the relative advancement
in different countries, or the possibility of the pursuit of
horticulture as a profession, or the poetic, the imaginative
stimulus of working among apple blossoms, or the value to
health of working in the open air. Perhaps any one of these
divisions of the total subject would require five thousand
words; certainly with so limited an amount of material of
expression I cannot cover all; and if I choose a bit of each,
the result will hopelessly confuse the reader as to the science,
for I shall perforce write a series of mere disjuncta membra.
I must, then, choose at once some guiding principle of
selection that will make clear whether, for instance, the
poetic appeal of the science has anything to do with my object.
Then, and only then, shall I be able to write an article that
will "take hold," that will bear in every part toward some
definite goal, that will leave my reader with a well-organized,
easily understood piece of writing. Only thus can I escape
making a mere enumeration about as sensible as to add potatoes
and church steeples and treasurers' reports and feather
boas and card parties and library paste in the hope of making
an integral whole. This guiding idea, which avoids such
selections, may perhaps best be called the "controlling purpose"
of the theme or article or book.
What, then, is the controlling purpose? It is the answer to
the question, "What am I trying to accomplish?" It is the
intelligent determination on the writer's part to make the material
of his writing march straight toward a definite goal which
he wishes the reader to perceive. It is the actively operating
point of view of the writer, the positive angle of vision that he
takes toward the subject. The controlling purpose in Lincoln's
mind as he rode up to Gettysburg must have been to
bring home to the civilians of the country, with a great
humble thrill toward accomplishment, the fact that after
the soldiers had done all they could, the civilians must reverently
take up the fight for freedom and union. His address
is immortal. But suppose, for a moment, that he had
ascended the platform with the vague idea of "saying something
about America, the war, you know, and the soldiers,
and liberty,—oh, yes, Liberty, of course,—and, oh, things
in general." Though he had thundered for hours his words
would likely have been ineffective. Only an intense realization
of the purpose in one's mind, and a consistent bending
of one's efforts to gain this end, bring simplicity, weightiness,
and the powerful effect in the reader's mind. From
the reader's point of view, in fact, we might say that the controlling
purpose is the means of making writing interesting,
since nothing so holds a reader's mind as to feel that he is
getting somewhere, that he is accomplishing something by
his efforts. In no other way can he be made so clearly to see
his progress, for only thus can he be prevented from undirected
wandering.
When we ask how we shall find and choose the controlling
purpose, we discover that it is determined by three things;
the subject itself, the personality of the writer, and the
character of the reader. Just how these three operate to
determine the cast of the writing we shall now attempt to
discover.
The first thing for the writer to do is to look at the subject
itself and learn what it is, really understand it. He must
know its exact nature before he can be allowed to proceed
with the development. Now this often requires much honesty,
for it is necessary to put aside prejudice and bias of
all kinds and to look at the subject just as it is, with a passionate
desire to learn its exact nature. For example, if you
are to write about the value of a college education, and you
are an idealist, you may be tempted to overlook the fact
that such a training does actually help a man to earn more
money than he otherwise would. You may think that such
a consideration is beneath your dignity. But you must put
aside your prejudice for the time being and must look the
fact honestly in the face. And, if you are a hard-headed,
practical person, you must nevertheless admit that a college
education is broadening, chastening, in its influence.
In either case you will not stop until you have looked at
all possible sides of the subject. You will amass such
facts, then, as that a college education is broadening, that
it increases earning capacity, that it puts a person in
touch with the world, that it makes him more able to be
a useful citizen. Other facts also will occur to you, but let
us suppose that these are the most important. If you carefully
examine them you will perhaps come to the conclusion
that a college education is valuable in that it helps a person
to realize his best possibilities in every way, as a citizen,
a friend, a personality. Or, if you are to write about the
aeroplane, you will discover that it is heavier than air, that
it is propelled by motor-power, that it attains certain speeds,
that it has definite lifting power, that it is self-stabilizing
to a remarkable degree, that it is made of certain kinds of
material, of certain weight, and that it has one, or two, or
even three planes. In addition you will note the qualities
of efficiency, of triumphing over winds, of beautiful poise,
and smoothness of execution. In both these cases you have
been seeking the core of your subject, the real meaning of it,
its essence. You must, before you begin to write a word,
be able to say what all the noticed facts amount to, to say,
"All told, this subject, this machine, or whatever it is, means
so-and-so." Perhaps of the aeroplane you would say, "This
machine stands for wonderful potential efficiency, not yet
completely understood." In the same way we say of people
and things, "He is a bore," or "a tyrant," or, "That is a great
social menace," or some other such comment. In each case
we have tagged the person or thing with what we think it
is at its heart, with its total significance. And not until
we have done this are we at all ready to begin writing.
The second influence in determining the controlling purpose
is the reaction of the writer to the subject. In the following
estimate of Lord Morley, the great English statesman,
you will notice that, though the treatment seems to be,
at first, purely objective, quite impersonal, the author cannot
keep himself out: he enters with the fifth word, "thrilling,"
in which he shows where he stands himself in regard to
truth, and he appears more at length in the last two clauses
of the selection, where he definitely set the approval of his
own heart upon Lord Morley's attitude. The third influence,
that of the reader, appears also, for when you consider that
the article was written for Englishmen to read, you see the
molding for the national temper, different of necessity from
that which would have been made for Frenchmen, for example.
The author relies upon a knowledge of Morley
among his readers, and upon a certain definite attitude
among them toward the truth.
You will catch that thrilling note in the oratory of Lord Morley
at all times, for he touches politics with a certain spiritual emotion
that makes it less a business or a game than a religion. He lifts
it out of the street on to the high lands where the view is wide and
the air pure and where the voices heard are the voices that do not
bewilder or betray. He is the conscience of the political world—the
barometer of our corporate soul. Tap him and you will see
whether we are at "foul" or "fair." He has often been on the
losing side: sometimes perhaps on the wrong side: never on the
side of wrong. He is
True as a dial to the sun,
Although it be not shined upon.
There is about him a sense of the splendid austerity of truth—cold
but exhilarating. It is not merely that he does not lie. There are
some other politicians of whom that may be said. It is that he
does not trifle with truth. It is sacred and inviolate. He would not
admit with Erasmus that "there are seasons when we must even
conceal truth," still less with Fouché that "les paroles sont faites
pour cacher nos pensées."[2] His regard for the truth is expressed
in the motto to the essay "On Compromise": "It makes all the difference
in the world whether we put truth in the first place or in
the second." This inflexible veracity is the rarest and the most
precious virtue in politics. It made him, if not, as Trevelyan says
of Macaulay, "the worst popular candidate since Coriolanus," at
least a severe test of a constituency's attachment. It is Lord Morley's
contribution to the common stock. Truth and Justice—these
are the fixed stars by which he steers his barque, and even the
Prayer Book places Religion and Piety after them, for indeed they
are the true foundation of religion and piety.[3]
The second consideration, then, is, "What does this subject
mean to me?" Of course there are subjects in which this
question is of slight importance: in writing a treatise on
mathematics, for instance, one might be quite indifferent
to any personal reaction, though in even such a piece of writing
there might appear a thrill at the neat marshaling of
forces for the inevitable waiting answer to the problem. In
general, however, this question is of great importance. Stevenson
goes so far as even to say that the author's attitude
is more important than the facts themselves. Certainly
a writer cannot tell what is the truth for himself unless he
expresses his ideas in the light of his own personality. Suppose
that in the case of the aeroplane, though you believe
the central fact as we expressed it above, you are primarily
appealed to by the fact that the motor is of the utmost importance,
and that at present it is not so highly developed as
it should be for perfect flying. You are, in other words, impressed
with the problem that confronts engineers of making
the motor more efficient. Your controlling purpose would
now be modified, then, and would perhaps read, "The aeroplane
is a machine of wonderful potential efficiency not
yet completely understood, especially as regards the driving
power." In the same way you would modify the purpose of
the treatment of college education and might say, "A college
education is valuable in that it helps a person to realize
his best possibilities in every way, but especially as an heir
of all the wisdom of the ages gone."
The relative importance of this second consideration depends
on whether the subject is much or little affected by
personal interpretation. In the personal essay, as written
by Lamb, for example, we may care more for the man than
for the facts, or more for the facts as seen by the man than
for the mere facts alone. In questions of society, of morality,
of taste, in which the answer is not absolute in any case,
in all matters that affect the well-being of humanity and in
which there is a shifting standard, the attitude of the writer
is important. The writer who wishes to have a voice of
authority must cling to the fact as to a priceless jewel, but
he must also remember that if, for example, he is writing
on Feminism, or Socialism, or Church Attendance, or The
Short Ballot, or The New Poetry, or The Value of Social
Clubs in the Country, or any such subject, we, the readers,
eagerly wait on his words as being primarily an expression of
his personal reaction to the matter. And the final value of
the treatment will depend on whether the personality is well-poised,
largely sympathetic, able to take an elastic view
of the subject and to bring it home to the reader as a
piece of warmly felt and honestly stated conviction. In
exposition, as well as in argument, we must ask the witness,—that
is, the writer,—whether he is prejudiced or not.
Especially must we do this when we happen to be the author
ourselves. Violent condemnation of Capital by a man who
has become embittered by mistreatment at the hands of
employers must be taken with somewhat of caution, just
as sweeping arraignment of Socialism by an arrogant capitalist
must be eyed askance.
It might not be amiss to remark here that the writer in
a college class who declares that he has no reaction to his
subject, that he is quite indifferent to it, should do one of
two things, either choose a new subject, or drop from college
and go to work at some vitalizing effort with other
people which will bring home realities to him in such a way
that he cannot fail to react.
In the following brief incident it is interesting to note
how the author shows his own personality. Another would
have thought of the problem of dietetics involved, or of the
absence of coffee or "parritch" or the rasher of bacon, or of
the austerity of the meal. To Gissing[4] the incident was
significant as showing a national characteristic both admirable
and amusing.
At an inn in the north I once heard three men talking at their
breakfast on the question of diet. They agreed that most people
ate too much meat, and one of them went so far as to declare that,
for his part, he rather preferred vegetables and fruit. "Why," he
said, "will you believe me that I sometimes make a breakfast of
apples?" This announcement was received in silence; evidently the
two listeners didn't quite know what to think of it. Thereupon
the speaker, in rather a blustering tone, cried out, "Yes, I can
make a very good breakfast on two or three pounds of apples."
Wasn't it amusing? And wasn't it characteristic? This
honest Briton had gone too far in frankness. 'T is all very well
to like vegetables and fruit up to a certain point; but to breakfast
on apples! His companions' silence proved that they were just a
little ashamed of him; his confession savoured of poverty or meanness;
to right himself in their opinion, nothing better occurred to
the man than to protest that he ate apples, yes, but not merely
one or two; he ate them largely, by the pound! I laughed at the
fellow, but I thoroughly understood him; so would every Englishman;
for at the root of our being is a hatred of parsimony. This
manifests itself in all manner of ludicrous or contemptible forms, but
no less is it the source of our finest qualities. An Englishman desires,
above all, to live largely; on that account he not only dreads
but hates and despises poverty. His virtues are those of the free-handed
and warm-hearted opulent man; his weaknesses come of
the sense of inferiority (intensely painful and humiliating) which
attaches in his mind to one who cannot spend and give; his vices,
for the most part, originate in loss of self-respect due to loss of secure
position.
The third consideration is, "Who is my reader, and what
are his characteristics?" The counter-question, "What
difference does it make who my reader is?" can be summarily
answered with the statement that it makes a great
deal of difference. As soon as you note what a large part
temperament plays in the forming of opinions in politics
and religion and social questions, and remember that
no two people ever react to any truth in exactly the same
way—that what seems to one sensible person monstrous
will appear to another equally sensible person as highly
virtuous—you will see that in all writing, where either the
understanding or the emotions are involved, this question
assumes importance. If we believe the theory with which
we set out, that all writing is done to accomplish an object,
that is, a certain effect in the reader's mind, and then remember
that different readers take different trails to the
same objective, and that some must be even coaxed back
from one trail into another, we shall see that it is vital that
the reader do not select the wrong way, and, like a futile
dog, "bark up the wrong tree." A hasty glance at current
magazines will at once show how operative this consideration
is in practical writing: The Atlantic Monthly uses a different
set of subjects and a different style of expression from
that of The Scientific American or The Black Cat or The
Parisienne. The editors, in other words, are remembering
who their readers are and are trying to meet them with
gifts, not with weapons of offense. After all, the reader is
always the destination of all writing; the place where the
effect will be made is the reader's mind.
To apply this third consideration to our two subjects,
the value of a college education and the aeroplane, let us see
how the treatment should differ according to the differing
readers. If, in the treatment of the first subject, we are
presenting our statements to a body of educators, even
though the facts of college education remain unmoved, and
though our personal leaning toward the supreme value in
dowering the student with the wisdom of the past is unchanged,
we shall yet see that these educators have already
thought as we have about the matter, that merely to repeat
to them will be futile and wearying; and we shall, if we are
wise, change the point of attack and develop the value as enabling
the student to apply to practical problems the wisdom
of the past. Or, if the readers are to be politicians whom we
wish to enlist in sympathy with larger endowments, we shall
perhaps treat the subject as being increased political insight
and sympathy with all people. In the treatment of the
aeroplane, if we are presenting our words to engineers, we
shall probably analyze the present lack of proper engine
power and try to suggest means of correction. And we shall
make our presentation in language that has not been stripped
of its technicalities but has been allowed to stand in engineering
terms. But if we address a body of benevolent
women who are trying to organize an "Airmen's Relief
Fund," and who look upon the machine with horror as a potential
destroyer of life, we shall simply show that accidents
may be caused through faulty engines which may often result
in loss of life. The original controlling purpose will now
appear, "The value of a college education lies in its offering
the best chance for personal development through showing
to the student his heirship to all the wisdom of the ages past,
especially as this is applied to present-day problems," or,
"The aeroplane is a machine of great potential efficiency not
yet completely understood, especially as regards the driving
power, through which lack of understanding grave accidents
may occur."
Now if we scan these two statements carefully, I believe
that we shall be persuaded of their inadequacy. To explain
to the benevolent women who are interested in saving lives
the fact that we do not yet fully understand the aeroplane,
is like attempting to persuade a man from the path of an
oncoming thunderous locomotive by telling him of the lack
of laws to regulate public safety. In other words, we have
forgotten that a wedge makes the easiest entrance, and we
have attacked on far too broad a front, have failed to whittle
away the chips that are of no value to the reader. Perhaps
we need a complete restatement of the controlling purpose,
occasioned by the nature of the reader. We may say that
the value of a college education is in enabling a student to
be of service to the state by applying the wisdom of the past,
or that the aeroplane, partly through our ignorance of it,
is causing terrible accidents. These purposes are far different
from those with which we started out. All are perfectly
true; these are better adapted to our particular readers,
are more useful in helping to accomplish our selected
aim. The gist of the matter is this: wisdom in writing demands
that we discover the special loophole through which
our readers regard the subject and then bring our material
within the view from that loophole, bearing in mind always
the training and the prejudices of the reader, and conforming
material to suit the special needs.
One large reason why college themes are liable to dullness
is the fact that few students write for any one in particular.
They merely put down colorless facts which do not stir a
reader in the slightest. They forget that facts exist, really,
only as they relate to people, individual people, and that
they must be clothed attractively, as is virtue for a child's
consumption, or the reader will have none of them. Even
the patient writer of themes should regard a specially chosen
reader as at the same time his best friend and his potentially
worst enemy: friend in the sense of recipient of literary gifts,
and enemy in the sense of possible foiler of all the author's
good intentions. As enemy the reader must be conquered,
must be made to read and understand; as friend he is to be
sympathetically met and smiled upon. And if there be no
reader determined by the circumstances, the writer should
choose some well-known friend and adapt his material to
that friend, or should select any ordinarily intelligent being
and use the widest appeal that he can.
Now the relative value of these three sources of the controlling
purpose is variable. In an article for the encyclopædia
the writer's reaction should be subordinated, since the reader
comes to the encyclopædia for facts and not for opinion.
Likewise the reader, in such an article, will be of minor importance,
for the article is addressed to general ordinary intelligence
that desires a straightforward statement. But as
we have seen, an article on Feminism must with the greatest
care watch the reader and the writer—the reader because
the subject rouses both assent and opposition; the writer
because the subject is of the kind that depend largely on
opinion. So a theme on the problem of the hired man, or
Tennyson's attitude toward science, or the reasons for attending
one university rather than another, or the value of
mechanical stokers, or the application of Mendel's Law to human
beings will vary its purpose according to the varying
importance of the three sources. Only one great caution
needs to be made. Never falsify or mistreat the facts: they
are the supreme thing. It is for this fault that the newspapers
are most blameable: they consider their readers and their
own points of view, but all too often they treat the facts
cavalierly. A high reverence for the truth, and an unflinching
determination to tell it are prime essentials.
So far we have been concerned with the problem of placing
the facts before the reader, of appealing to his intelligence.
But writing consists of vastly more than that alone.
After the understanding, sometimes before, must be considered
the emotions. We have the facts, we know what
we think of them, and we are reasonably sure of the reader's
attitude. Now we must discover how to set the reader's
emotions afire in so far as we desire such an effect. In listening
to a great tragedy we perceive the cold analysis of a great
truth of life; but that is not all: far out beyond the bounds of
understanding our emotions are profoundly stirred and we
feel pity and terror. So in the account of a tremendous battle,
of a fire, of anything that touches human life at all nearly
and with power, our emotions are called into play. Now
different pieces of writing, just like different subjects, call
for different degrees of emotional reaction. Drama always
rouses us, lyric poems depend upon their emotional quality,
the informal essay has much emotional appeal, fiction of any
sort stirs our feelings, and the more powerful the writing is,
the more sure the appeal.
At first thought most expository writing might be considered
to make slight appeal, if any, to emotions. That is not
necessarily true; the more effective the exposition, the more
real is usually the call to feeling. Often this call is subtle,
usually it is subordinate to the appeal to the understanding,
but in most effective expository writing it will be found. In
an explanation of the Panama Canal certainly there would
be roused the reader's admiration and wonder at the magnitude
of the operation. The mere analysis of the facts in
a criminal trial often settles the case, so great is the emotional
appeal. In didactic writing the call to emotion is less strong,
though such a writer as Jonathan Edwards could explain the
writhing of man like a spider before the Almighty in a profoundly
moving way. In axiomatic mathematical propositions
we find perhaps the least strong appeal: that the sum
of the angles of a triangle is equal to two right angles might
seem to be divorced from all excitement. But in most exposition
when emotional appeal is overlooked the writing
suffers.
In an account of the American Civil War, for example, the
writer might set out to show that the conflict was the culmination
of the struggle between yeoman and cavalier begun
long since in England. But the war meant more than that.
The author will then see the emotional significance of the
fight and will add to his purpose the intention to thrill the
reader at the magnificent exhibition, on both sides, of devotion
to an idea. So Emerson, in his essay on "Fate" in The
Conduct of Life, fills the reader with gloom for page after
page, detailing how thoroughly the individual is bound down
by conditions of birth, sex, breeding, wealth—and then in
two wonderful sentences he turns the whole course of thought
and emotion by saying, "Intellect annuls fate. So far as a
man thinks, he is free," and the reader is stirred as with a
trumpet call to renewed courage, which, to use Emerson's
words, "neither brandy, nor nectar, nor sulphuric ether,
nor hell-fire, nor ichor, nor poetry, nor genius" can overcome.
And the historian Greene, in his well-known account
of Queen Elizabeth, states his controlling purpose in the
words, "Elizabeth was at once the daughter of Henry and
of Anne Boleyn." But these words are not the whole of
his purpose; he intends, besides the intellectual grasping
of the Queen's character, an intense admiration and wonder
at the resourcefulness, the shrewd judgment, and a reaction
of amusement to the strange outbreaks of unwomanly freaks
or of feminine wiles.
The controlling purpose, then, is almost always of a dual
nature; it aims at both the understanding and the emotions.
Whenever there is any real possibility of making it thus double
the writer should so express it to himself.
In the following magazine article such a double purpose
obviously exists. First of all there are the facts of the
marching of American troops through London. These facts
are unchangeable. Baldly stated, the significance of the
fact is that the New World is coming to the help of the
Old World against the monster of unrestrained militarism.
To a person who regards life coldly, as the mere interplay of
calculable forces, one whose emotions are not concerned, this
would be a sufficient statement of the whole truth, of the
total significance. But such writing would miss the chance
of power, would be forever less valuable than it ought to be,
for a great warming of the heart answers those footfalls in
London streets. In other words, just as we have seen that
there are two kinds of exposition—mere noting of facts
and interpreting of facts—so we now see that interpretation
can be either lifeless, or moving, charged with power. It is
the old difference between the drama and a sermon: the play
thrills and the sermon convinces. Either may add the other
quality—a fine drama or a well-made sermon does. In
this account of American soldiers in London the truth is
made clear, but far more than that it is made alive, pulsating
with emotion of national pride, of racial solidarity,
of high moral purpose. In so far as the writer succeeds
in stirring us, in just so far he is more likely to make
the truth take hold upon us and bind us firmly in its grasp.
It is the writing that both convinces and moves us that is
lasting, that is really powerful.
At midday on August 15 I stood on the pavement in Cockspur
Street and watched the first contingent of American troops pass
through London.
I had been attracted thither by the lure of a public "show," by
the blare of a band, and by a subconscious desire to pay tribute in
my small way to a great people. It was a good day for London, intermittently
bright, with great scurrying masses of cumuli overhead,
and a characteristic threat of rain, which fortunately held
off. Cockspur Street, as you know, is a turning off Trafalgar
Square, and I chose it because the crowd was less dense there than
in the square itself. By getting behind a group of shortish people
and by standing on tiptoe I caught a fleeting view of the faces of
nearly every one of the passing soldiers.
London is schooled to shows of this kind. The people gather
and wait patiently on the line of route. And then some genial
policemen appear and mother the people back into some sort of
line, an action performed with little fuss or trouble. Then mounted
police appear, headed by some fat official in a cockade hat and with
many ribbons on his chest. And some one in the crowd calls
out:
"Hullo, Percy! Mind you don't fall off yer 'orse!"
Then the hearers laugh and begin to be on good terms with themselves,
for they know that the "show" is coming. Then follows
the inevitable band, and we begin to cheer.
It is very easy and natural for a London crowd to cheer. I have
heard Kaiser William II cheered in the streets of London! We always
cheer our guests, and we love a band and a "show" almost as
much as our republican friends across the channel. I have seen
royal funerals and weddings, processions in honor of visiting presidents
and kings, the return of victorious generals, processions of
Canadian, Australian, Indian, French and Italian troops and bands.
I wouldn't miss these things for worlds. They give color to our
social life and accent to our everyday emotions. It is, moreover,
peculiarly interesting to observe national traits on a march: the
French, with their exuberant élan, throwing kisses to the women
as they pass; our own Tommies, who have surprised the world with
their gayety, and keep up a constant ragging intercourse with the
crowd and cannot cease from singing; the Indians, who pass like a
splendidly carved frieze; the Canadians, who move with a free
and independent swing and grin in a friendly way; the Scotch, who
carry it off better than any one. But I had never seen American
troops, and I was anxious to see how they behaved. I said to myself,
"The American is volatile and impressionable, like a child."
I had met Americans who within an hour's acquaintance had told
me their life-story, given me their views on religion, politics, and
art, and invited me to go out to Iowa or Wisconsin or California,
and spend the summer with them. Moreover, the American is
above all things emotional and—may I say it?—sentimental. It
would therefore be extremely interesting to see how he came
through this ordeal.
The first band passed, and the people were waving flags and
handkerchiefs from the windows. We could hear the cheers go up
from the great throng in the square. And there at last, sure enough,
was Old Glory, with its silken tassels floating in the London breeze,
carried by a solemn giant, with another on either side.
And then they came, marching in fours, with their rifles at the
slope, the vanguard of Uncle Sam's army. And we in Cockspur
Street raised a mighty cheer. They were solemn, bronzed men,
loose of limb, hard, and strong, with a curious set expression of
purpose about them.
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
And they looked neither to the right nor the left; nor did they
look up or smile or apparently take any notice of the cheers we
raised. We strained forward to see their faces, and we cried out to
them our welcome.
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
They were not all tall; some were short and wiry. Some of the
officers were rather elderly and wore horn spectacles. But they
did not look at us or raise a smile of response. They held themselves
very erect, but their eyes were cast down or fixed upon the
back of the man in front of them. There came an interval, and
another band, and then Old Glory once more, and we cheered the
flag even more than the men. Fully a thousand men passed in this
solemn procession, not one of them smiling or looking up. It became
almost disconcerting. It was a thing we were not used to.
A fellow-cockney near me murmured:
"They're solemn-looking blokes, ain't they?"
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
The band blared forth once more, a drum-and-fife corps with a
vibrant thrill behind it. We strained forward more eagerly to see
the faces of our friends from the New World. We loved it best when
the sound of the band had died away and the only music was the
steady throb of those friendly boots upon our London streets. And
still they did not smile. I had a brief moment of some vague apprehension,
as though something could not be quite right. Some such
wave, I think, was passing through the crowd. What did it mean?
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
The cheers died away for a few moments in an exhausted diminuendo.
Among those people, racked by three years of strain
and suffering, there probably was not one who had not lost some
one dear to them. Even the best nerves have their limit of endurance.
Suddenly the ready voice of a woman from the pavement
called out:
"God bless you, Sammy!"
And then we cheered again in a different key, and I noticed a boy
in the ranks throw back his head and look up. On his face was the
expression we see only on the faces of those who know the finer
sensibilities—a fierce, exultant joy that is very near akin to tears.
And gradually I became aware that on the faces of these grim men
was written an emotion almost too deep for expression.
As they passed it was easy to detect their ethnological heritage.
There was the Anglo-Saxon type, perhaps predominant; the Celt;
the Slav; the Latin; and in many cases definitely the Teuton: and
yet there was not one of them that had not something else, who was
not preëminently a good "United States man." It was as though
upon the anvil of the New World all the troubles of the Old, after
being passed through a white-hot furnace, had been forged into
something clear and splendid. And they were hurrying on to get
this accomplished. For once and all the matter must be settled.
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
There was a slight congestion, and the body of men near me
halted and marked time. A diminutive officer with a pointed
beard was walking alone. A woman in the crowd leaned forward
and waved an American flag in his face. He saluted, made some
kindly remark, and then passed on.
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
The world must be made safe for democracy.
And I thought inevitably of the story of the Titan myth, of
Prometheus, the first real democrat, who held out against the gods
because they despised humanity. And they nailed him to a rock,
and cut off his eyelids, and a vulture fed upon his entrails.
But Prometheus held on, his line of reasoning being:
"After Uranus came Cronus. After Cronus came Zeus. After
Zeus will come other gods."
It is the finest epic in human life, and all the great teachers and
reformers who came after told the same story—Christ, Vishnu,
Confucius, Mohammed, Luther, Shakespeare. The fundamental
basis of their teaching was love and faith in humanity. And whenever
humanity is threatened, the fires which Prometheus stole from
the gods will burn more brightly in the heart of man, and they will
come from all quarters of the world.
He is trampling out the vintage where the grapes of wrath are stored;
He hath loosed the fateful lightning of his terrible, swift sword.
There is no quarter, no mercy, to the enemies of humanity.
There is no longer a war; it is a crusade. And as I stood on the
flags of Cockspur Street, I think I understood the silence of those
grim men. They seemed to epitomize not merely a nation, not
merely a flag, but the unbreakable sanctity of human rights and
human life. And I knew that whatever might happen, whatever
the powers of darkness might devise, whatever cunning schemes or
diabolical plans, or whatever temporary successes they might attain,
they would ultimately go down into the dust before "the
fateful lightning." "After Zeus will come other gods."
Tramp, tramp, tramp, tramp.
Nothing could live and endure against that steady and irresistible
progression. And we know how you can do things, America.
We have seen your workshops, your factories, and your engines of
peace. And we have seen those young men of yours at the Olympic
Games, with their loose, supple limbs, their square, strong faces.
When the Spartans, lightly clad, but girt for war, ran across the
hills to Athens and, finding the Persian hosts defeated, laughed,
and congratulated the Athenians, and ran back again—since
those days there never were such runners, such athletes, as these
boys of yours from Yale and Harvard, Princeton and Cornell.
And so on that day, if we cheered the flag more than we cheered
the men, it was because the flag was the symbol of the men's hearts,
which were too charged with the fires of Prometheus to trust themselves
expression.
At least that is how it appeared to me on that forenoon in Cockspur
Street, and I know that later in the day, when I met a casual
friend, and he addressed me with the usual formula of the day:
"Any news?"
I was able to say:
"Yes, the best news in the world."
And when he replied:
"What news?"
I could say with all sincerity:
"I have seen a portent. The world is safe for democracy."
Despite whatever of good has been said here about the
controlling purpose, there may lurk the suspicion that it is,
after all, dangerous, that perhaps it gives to a piece of writing
a tendency toward bias, partial interpretation, even unfairness,
and that it makes toward incompleteness. In the
first place, in answering this charge, we must remember that
facts as related to people are eternally subject to different
interpretations according to shifting significance, which is
determined largely by the individual to whom the facts are
related. In the second place we have to remind ourselves
that seldom does a writer try to say all that can be said about
his subject. Much is always either implied or left to another
piece of writing. And finally, even when an author attempts
perfect completeness and objectivity, he usually addresses
his work to some one in particular, even though the "some
one" is as vague as the general reading public; and that
some one has a particular attitude that must be borne in
mind.
In "Solemn-Looking Blokes" not everything about the
subject is said. From one point of view the tramp of American
feet in London streets signified that the United States
had emerged from its traditional aloofness and had joined
the main current of the world; from another, that a tremendous
military preparation was going on in America, the first fruits
of which were those solemn ringing steps; from another,
that however Europe had professed to despise American
power, she was now willing, eager, to accept American aid;
from another, that the old enmity between England and
America has been forgotten in the common bond of like
ideals and racial traditions. Each of these possible meanings—and
there are more not listed here—is implied in the
treatment actually given to the subject. No one of them is
really developed. Instead, we have flowering before us the
idea that the world is to be made safe for democracy. No one
would presume to declare that the total possibilities of the
subject are here met and explained; yet no one can rightly
say that the chosen treatment is unfair. Considering the
facts, the author, and the people who would read the article,
and their emotional connection with the facts, we see that
the author chose the purpose that seemed most useful—to
make American hearts warm to the fact that their country
was helping to make the world safer for all men everywhere.
In other words, facts are useful only in so far as they accomplish
some definite end, which, in writing, is to make the
reader see the truth as the author thinks that he should try
to make the reader see it.
Now, of course, if the writer makes an unfair analysis,
if he blindly or willfully falsifies in seeing or expressing his
subject, his writing is not only useless but actually vicious.
The analysis must be correct. Every subject has its center
of truth, which can be discovered by patient clear thinking;
if the thinking be either unclear or impatient, the interpretation
will be false. If the author of "Solemn-Looking
Blokes" has made an incorrect estimate, his writing is
futile. There is no more challenging quest than the search
for the real truth at the core of a chosen subject. Perhaps
the very difficulty of attaining success is what has stayed
many minds in floundering, timid, fogginess.
As to the charge that infusion of emotional quality into
the writing produces bias, first of all it must be said that if
the subject contains no emotion, none should be attempted
in the writing. In a report, for example, of the relative
value of different woods for shingles, an author will hardly try
to infuse emotion, for the reader wishes to learn, quickly and
easily, just what kind of wood is the best. But most subjects
are not thus aloof; even the report about shingles becomes
of vast significance to the owner of extensive timber
lands which are suddenly found to be of high value. All subjects
which concern the prosperity and happiness of humanity
are charged with emotion; the nearer to the great facts
of life, such as birth, marriage, death, food, shelter, love,
hatred, the keener the emotion. Who shall write of problems
of heredity and leave us unstirred? Who shall treat
of our vast irrigation projects, which turn the deserts into
fair gardens and give food to millions of people, without
firing the imagination? The writer's task is to look so clearly
at his subject that he discovers its true value to both brain
and heart.
As a matter of fact, in writing of such subjects a writer
finds that words will be emotional, whether he will have them
so or not, that they take sides, are charged with tendency and
fly toward or away from an emotional quality with all the
power of electricity. Now, this emotional quality, when it
is uncontrolled, is dangerous. Words that show tendency
must be guided with the firm hand lest they lead the reader
into wrong impressions and into the confusion that comes
from counter emotions, the strong impression of disunion.
It is only by relating these cross-tendencies to a guiding idea
that they can be made to serve the author's purpose. To
choose wisely a controlling purpose that recognizes and
handles the inherent emotions of words is merely to organize
inescapable material. In the following selection from Emerson's
"Fate" we find the emotional quality both high and
well-organized. Such a paragraph might easily be made to
confuse a reader hopelessly, but Emerson drives the chargers
of his thought straight to his goal, intellectual and
emotional, and holds tight his reins:
Nature is no sentimentalist,—does not cosset or pamper us. We
must see that the world is rough and surly, and will not mind
drowning a man or a woman, but swallows your ship like a grain
of dust. The cold, inconsiderate of persons, tingles your blood, benumbs
your feet, freezes a man like an apple. The diseases, the
elements, fortune, gravity, lightning, respect no persons. The
way of Providence is a little rude. The habit of snake and spider,
the snap of the tiger and other leapers and bloody jumpers, the
crackle of the bones of his prey in the coil of the anaconda,—these
are in the system, and our habits are like theirs. You have just
dined, and however the slaughter-house is concealed in the graceful
distance of miles, there is complicity, expensive races—race
living at the expense of race. The planet is liable to shocks from
comets, perturbations from planets, rendings from earthquake and
volcano, alterations of climate, precessions of equinoxes. Rivers
dry up by opening of the forest. The sea changes its bed. Towns
and counties fall into it. At Lisbon an earthquake killed men like
flies. At Naples three years ago ten thousand persons were
crushed in a few minutes. The scurvy at sea, the sword of the
climate in the west of Africa, at Cayenne, at Panama, at New
Orleans, cut off men like a massacre. Our western prairies shake
with fever and ague. The cholera, the small-pox, have proved as
mortal to some tribes as a frost to crickets, which, having filled
the summer with noise, are silenced by the fall of the temperature of
one night. Without uncovering what does not concern us, or counting
how many species of parasites hang on a bombyx, or groping
after intestinal parasites or infusory biters, or the obscurities of
alternate generation,—the forms of the shark, the labrus, the jaw
of the sea-wolf paved with crushing teeth, the weapons of the
grampus, and other warriors hidden in the sea, are hints of ferocity
in the interior of nature. Let us not deny it up and down. Providence
has a wild, rough, incalculable road to its end, and it is of
no use to try to whitewash its huge, mixed instrumentalities, or to
dress up that terrific benefactor in a clean shirt and white neck-cloth
of a student in divinity.[6]
Now this controlling purpose, including both the appeal
to the understanding and that to the emotions, should be
stated, clearly, before the author begins his actual writing,
in one sentence. The value of this is at once apparent: our
minds tend all too much to wander from subject to subject,
browsing here and there, without any really directed feeding.
Now such procedure, though difficult to avoid, is
nevertheless harmful to our writing. The edge of the writing
is never so keen, the telling of the message, whatever it
may be, is never so well done, until we thoroughly organize
and direct all that we are to say. In phrasing the controlling
purpose in one sentence, we make just such an organization.
And we have one which is most easily handled, most
easily remembered, least likely to allow us to escape into
empty wandering. Even in a long work this should be done,
this unifying knot should be tied in the writer's mind. Those
readers who rise from the last pages of a long historical work,
covering several volumes and hundreds or thousands of
pages, with a clear central conception of the whole work are
profoundly grateful to the author. It is safe to say that such
a conception could not have been given to the reader had
not the writer, before he wrote a word, formulated in a few
words the goal, the aim of his writing. This sentence should
include the emotional appeal either as stated in a separate
clause or phrase, or as expressed in the choice of words to
present the facts.
The amount of machinery that seems to be required for
using the controlling purpose may appear too much for
practical purposes in one short lifetime. The truth is that
the actual finding of the purpose will require much less
time, often, than the explanation of the process here has
needed. In a short theme you will often be able to scan the
subject itself, to estimate your own reaction to the subject,
and to determine upon your reader with remarkable quickness.
More frequently you will find difficulty in determining
the emotional quality of the material and your desires.
But a little practice will enable you to do the preliminary
thinking with rapidity and comfort. But if your subject is
difficult, and if the effect is of great importance, by no means
allow yourself to be swerved from determination to find the
real object which you are seeking, but even at the expense
of time and trouble state the center of your intentions as
related to the subject, yourself, and your reader.
We have yet to answer the practical question: when I sit
down to write, of just what value will the controlling purpose
be to me in the actual task of expressing my ideas?
How can it really serve me in my writing? The answer
is clear: the controlling purpose is of the utmost strategic
value in helping to select and arrange material for attack
upon the objective, which is the effect to be created in the
reader's mind. Now the best strategy always combines the
line of greatest advantage to the writer, the line of least
resistance from the reader, and the necessities of the subject.
In other words, what point can I attack easiest, where is my
opponent weakest, what demands of the ground—gullies,
hills, swamps, etc.—must I allow for? Sometimes these
three are more or less mutually antagonistic; sometimes
they unite with the greatest helpfulness, as we shall see.
The first question is, What, and how many, forces shall
I choose for the attack? Remember, we do not now merely
attack in general, wherever we find an enemy. Instead, we
decide that our objective is, perhaps, a hill ten miles across
the enemy's frontier. The taking of that hill is our controlling
purpose. It would be easiest for us to use several
regiments of fresh young troops. But the terrain is strewn
with gullies and hillocks, with boulders and tangled timber.
So we shall use two regiments of veteran troops who are accustomed
to rough country, and follow these with some fresh
youngsters who are endowed with sense and a desire to outdo
the veterans. Since the enemy has a strong battery, we
shall use heavy artillery. And since the enemy lacks machine
guns, we shall use many of them and catch him where
he is weak and may be terrified. We could easily send thirty
camp kitchens to the fighting lines, but strategy demands
that they be kept back.
In exactly the same way Mr. Burroughs plans the essay
which follows this discussion. His controlling purpose is
obviously to make the reader understand the process of bee-hunting
in such a way as to be attracted to it as a delightful
sport. The nature of the subject demands that the several
steps in the process be explained. Well, that suits Mr.
Burroughs, because he knows these steps. The easiest
method for him is to narrate his own experiences. Of course
he could investigate the authorities on bee-hunting, and
write a treatise, but that would be more difficult, and moreover,
it would not meet the line of least resistance from the
reader. To be successful, the essay must overcome the
reader's inertia and make him feel that he is actually sharing
in things that he enjoys. The selection is thus determined.
From his personal experience, as giving the writer the greatest
advantage, Mr. Burroughs chooses. He selects details
about the beauty of nature because a reader would prefer
to have fine surroundings. He mentions traits of the bee
that are interesting or necessary to know. He narrates two
special experiences of his own for added attractiveness. And
all the while, lest inertia raise its head, he lures the reader
with the glimpses of pails full of rich golden honey. In other
words, keeping his eye for his controlling purpose, Mr. Burroughs
can easily select the things that will accomplish that
purpose to his own greatest advantage, the reader's greatest
ease, and according to the demands of the subject.
You do not find in the essay a discussion of the lucrative
value of bees, nor of the complicated life of the hive, nor of
the present standing of the science of bee-keeping. These
topics, however interesting, are not useful to the controlling
purpose. The standard is, not connection, but usefulness.
"Any road," says Carlyle, "this simple Entepfuhl road,
will lead you to the end of the world," and if you follow mere
connection with your subjects, you will find yourself at the
end of the world. The practical helpfulness of the controlling
purpose is seen when you ask yourself the question,
"Does the matter that I am putting in this paragraph, this
sentence, actually advance my reader in thought or emotion
or both, nearer the point to which I wish to lead him?"
Thus the question of selection is answered.
If we could have our own sweet will in attacking the hill
ten miles beyond the border, we should ask the enemy to
stack his arms, and then, with trumpet and drum and flag
we should sweep in and take possession. But our sweet will
must give way to necessity. Since unscalable crags lie
ahead, we shall have to go round to the rear of the hill.
Since we must cross a swamp, engineers must precede and
build a road. Though we should like to crawl up a wide
valley on the other side, we must choose a smaller one, because
the enemy could wither us away in the larger one.
And, to trick the enemy, we shall perhaps open fire far off
on the left, while we are stealing out to the right, and thus
we may take him off his guard. Our purpose of securing that
hill makes these things necessary.
Similarly, in writing, we may sometimes employ the order
of greatest advantage, but more often we must modify this
order to meet the requirements of the subject and to rouse
the least resistance from the reader. In Stevenson's essay,
"Pulvis et Umbra," part of which follows the essay by Mr.
Burroughs, the author used the method of greatest advantage.
His object is to thrill the reader at the thought that
mankind constantly strives in spite of all his failures. Several
orders are possible: he could treat of the striving alone, neglecting
the failure; he could treat the striving first and then
the failure, or vice versa, and so on. He saw that he would
gain his purpose best if he treated failure first, until he had
fairly overwhelmed the reader, and then suddenly shifted
and showed that in spite of all this failure man still strives.
He had to run the risk of offending the reader at the beginning
by his insistence upon failure, and thus rousing the reader's
possible great resistance. For we do not like to read unpleasant
things. But he took the chance, knowing that if,
by skillful use of words he could persuade the reader through
the first part, he could easily thrill him with the reaction.
For it makes a great difference whether we say, "In spite
of striving, man always fails," or "In spite of failure, man
always strives." The selection from the essay which appears
here is taken from the middle. It is interesting to
note that the first two sentences of the essay read: "We
look for some reward of our endeavors and are disappointed;
not success, not happiness, not even peace of conscience,
crowns our ineffectual efforts to do well. Our frailties are
invincible, our virtues barren; the battle goes sore against
us to the going down of the sun." And the words of the
final sentence of the essay are: "Let it be enough for faith,
that the whole creation groans in mortal frailty, strives with
unconquerable constancy: surely not all in vain."
In the essay by Mr. Burroughs the author's advantage
and the reader's acquiescence largely coincide, so that the
author can at once begin with remarks about the attractiveness
of the hunt, the delights of its successful conclusion.
To discuss at once the possibility of being stung would have
been unwise, because unpleasant, and the controlling purpose
of the essay is to attract. Later, this topic can safely
be tucked in.
Mr. Wilson's war messages showed a combination of the
lines of greatest advantage and of least resistance with the
nature of the historical events. These messages began with
a series of facts which, obviously true, would rouse no resistance
and would at the same time insert some resentment
against Germany, the very thing that the author wished to
do. Then they followed the strict chronological order, as if
the author were pursuing a course already mapped for him—which,
of course, he was not doing. With the controlling
purpose of showing that America's entrance into the war
was occasioned entirely by Germany's actions, he then proceeded
to base the proposals of the messages upon the very
facts that the readers had already accepted in accordance
with his ultimate point of view. Such skillful manipulation
deserved the success that the messages met.
All three of these examples gain their point, their objective.
They do this largely because the authors knew
exactly what they wished to do, what their controlling purposes
were, and then marshaled their material so as to accomplish
this end. Some of the topics that are subordinated,
such, for example, as the possibility of being stung, are as
important as others which are magnified, such as the beauty
of nature—that is, they are as important in an impersonal
way. As soon as the controlling purpose is known, however,
they immediately become dangerous unless so placed as to
bring the reader nearer the goal and not to push him from it.
The point is that knowing the controlling purpose, that is,
having thought out beforehand exactly what you wish to do
with subject and reader, you are at once aware of both helps
and obstacles, and can make use of the one, avoid the other.
Thus you will consider both the reader's ease and his
prejudices. If you are to write of abstruse matters, of some
question in philosophy or ethics or religion, in order to carry
your reader with you you will begin with things that he can
understand, and thus pave a highway into the misty lands
where you desire to take him. Failure of some eminent philosophers
to receive recognition has been due to their lack of
a comprehensive controlling purpose, to their restricting attention
to the subject alone regardless of the reader. In setting
forth the principle of the machinery that digs tunnels
under rivers Mr. Brooks in The Web-foot Engineer first
shows how a boy digs a tunnel into a sand bank, and then
proceeds, with the reader's understanding assured, to the
more complex but still similar operation under the river.
In explaining inductive reasoning, with the controlling purpose
of making it seem both frequent and natural, Huxley
showed first how we reason practically about the nature
of apples in a basket at the grocer's. The reader's resistance
is thus avoided and the writer's advantage is increased.
A shrewd controlling purpose also makes allowance for
the reader's prejudices. You ought to take as much care
to cajole your reader into following you as the cook does
to make us happy to the final morsel. After ices and cakes
and coffee a roast or a soup is positively offensive; the cook
wisely wins the battle of the spit and the dripping pan while
the epicure is still receptive. So, if you are to explain democracy
in a state where the recall of judges is practiced to an
aristocrat who distrusts the "common herd" and is easily
ruffled, you will do well to preface discussion of this recall
with words about the general excellence of life in the state
and then, when your reader is in a mood of acceptance, pass
to the possibly offensive topic. Without knowing just what
you wish to accomplish, you are likely to write in what may
seem a dogged, defiant mood that intends to strike right and
left, hoping to wallow through to victory.
If between us and the enemy's fort is a stream which needs
pontoons for crossing, and we blindly start out marching
up toward victory with no pontoons, we shall perhaps sail
away to sea, but shall also probably not win the fort. If we
insist upon keeping our platoon as rigidly straight, even
while we climb hills through the woods, as ever a line was
kept at West Point, we shall come to grief. So, if the logic of
the subject has imperious demands, the controlling purpose
must make count of them. William James in his essay, "The
Moral Equivalent of War," saw that before a reader could
understand how civic work could be a moral equivalent, he
must see what the morality of war is. The subject demands
this. In an account of the United States Government it
might be logically necessary to state and explain first the
theory of checks and balances before the relations of executive,
legislative, and judicial branches could be properly estimated.
Wisely chosen, the controlling purpose of such an
account would make this fact at once evident.
Constantly keeping in mind, in planning and composing
an article, what the objective is, makes even the individual
paragraphs and sentences more successful. If you will examine
the paragraphs in "Pulvis et Umbra," you will observe,
pretty uniformly, at the beginning and end of each, a
strong statement of the message of the paragraph, sentences
of high emotional value. Each paragraph definitely advances
the cause of the controlling purpose. Even the sentences—an
example of a sentence uncontrolled occurs in Mr. Hamlin
Garland's book, A Son of the Middle Border: "It stood
on the bank of a wide river and had all the value of a seaport
to me, for in summer-time great hoarsely bellowing steam-boats
came and went from its quay, and all about it rose high
wooded hills." The final item about the hills is in no way
necessary, does not even help to give the feeling of a seaport,
which more often than not lacks high hills. A sentence
from Stevenson is in contrast: "The sun upon my shoulders
warmed me to the heart, and I stooped forward and plunged
into the sea." In this sentence facts, rhythm, even the sound
of the words drive in one direction.
Without being too dogmatic—for every problem in writing
is new and not infrequently a law to itself—you may be
sure that if you have a definite controlling purpose, and
know well what it is, you will be more likely to attain success
with subject and with reader when you come to the
ordering of your material.
Finally, since strategy suggests that we attack the weakest
places in the enemy's defense, we shall do well, unless the
logic of the subject or the reader's prejudice demand otherwise,
to make our strongest blows when the enemy, the
reader, is least prepared, that is, at the beginning and the
end. Success in writing depends so much upon the freshness
of the reader's mind, that an attaque brusque at first
to insert important things, and a strong reinforcement at
the end, when the reader is pricking up his ears at the coming
final period, form a wise strategy. If, in order to understand
one point, another is necessary, or to avoid irritation, a
roundabout method is advisable, the path is plain. When
these accidents do not obtain, the reader's understanding
will be most easily won at the beginning and the end. At
these points you must see to it that the reader is guided,
with the first word, toward the emotional tone that your
controlling purpose demands, and toward some important
idea that bolsters this purpose, even if, as we have seen
Stevenson do, you seem to be at first flying away from the
purpose which we later discover. Thus Mr. Taft, in an
article entitled "Present Relations of the Learned Professions
to Political Government," places the ministry at the
beginning and the law at the end. His controlling purpose
is to make the reader believe that every profession offers
large chance for the conscientious man to be of use to the
political government. Consequently he chooses the two
that he thinks most important, and of these places the less
important at the beginning and the more important at the
end. In this way he succeeds at once in turning the reader
as he wishes, and leaves him also with the strongest possible
bias toward belief. And since these two professions offer
the greatest chance for victory for his controlling purpose, he
gives them much more space than to the others, almost three
times as much to law, for instance, as to teaching.
Moreover, since the emotions are affected in much writing,
the skilled strategist will instantly bear in mind just what
emotion he wishes to rouse, and will see that the ideas of
greater moving value receive larger development. Mr.
Burroughs gives much more space to the sections that deal
with the excitement and the joy of bee-hunting than to those
that deal with the less pleasant side. To the difficulty of
detecting the flight of a bee he gives the single sentence:
"Sometimes one's head will swim following it, and often
one's eyes are put out by the sun." To the interesting actions
of the bee when it is caught he gives at least ten times
as much space. In this way he guides the reader's emotions
in the way he wishes them to go—and makes successful
writing.
The chief strategic problem in exposition, then, is that
of so choosing and arranging the material that the point of
the writing is made with the proper emphasis. For the accomplishment
of this purpose the writer must be able to
answer the question, "What do I wish to do in this piece of
writing?" Then he must bring all the material and its expression
to bear upon the reader's mind so that the desired end may
be inevitable. To determine what his purpose is the writer
must consult the subject itself, his own personality, and
the reader. He must also bear in mind the reader's intellect
and his emotions. And he must unify the approach to both
intellect and emotions. The firmly held conception of what
his purpose is will determine what material he is to choose—what
is useful and what is not—and also how to arrange
this material and how to proportion the space that different
sections shall have. He will arrange the material for the
greatest advantage to himself and the least resistance from
the reader. In other words, to make his writing successful
in the sense of accomplishing its end, the writer must, before
he sets down a single word, decide upon what his controlling
purpose is to be and just how he intends to make material
and expression—even in the individual sentence—unite
to drive in the one direction of that controlling purpose.
John Burroughs
One looks upon the woods with a new interest when he suspects
they hold a colony of bees. What a pleasing secret it is; a tree with
a heart of comb-honey, a decayed oak or maple with a bit of Sicily
or Mount Hymettus stowed away in its trunk or branches; secret
chambers where lies hidden the wealth of ten thousand little free-booters,
great nuggets and wedges of precious ore gathered with risk
and labor from every field and wood about.
But if you would know the delights of bee-hunting, and how
many sweets such a trip yields beside honey, come with me some
bright, warm, late September or early October day. It is the golden
season of the year, and any errand or pursuit that takes us abroad
upon the hills or by the painted woods and along the amber colored
streams at such a time is enough. So, with haversacks filled with
grapes and peaches and apples and a bottle of milk,—for we shall
not be home to dinner,—and armed with a compass, a hatchet, a
pail, and a box with a piece of comb-honey neatly fitted into it—any
box the size of your hand with a lid will do nearly as well as the
elaborate and ingenious contrivance of the regular bee-hunter—we
sally forth. Our course at first lies along the highway, under
great chestnut-trees whose nuts are just dropping, then through
an orchard and across a little creek, thence gently rising through
a long series of cultivated fields toward some high, uplying land,
behind which rises a rugged wooded ridge or mountain, the most
sightly point in all this section. Behind this ridge for several
miles the country is wild, wooded, and rocky, and is no doubt the
home of many wild swarms of bees.
After a refreshing walk of a couple of miles we reach a point where
we will make our first trial—a high stone wall that runs parallel
with the wooded ridge referred to, and separated from it by a broad
field. There are bees at work there on that goldenrod, and it
requires but little manœuvring to sweep one into our box. Almost
any other creature rudely and suddenly arrested in its career and
clapped into a cage in this way would show great confusion and
alarm. The bee is alarmed for a moment, but the bee has a passion
stronger than its love of life or fear of death, namely, desire for
honey, not simply to eat, but to carry home as booty. "Such rage
of honey in their bosom beats," says Virgil. It is quick to catch the
scent of honey in the box, and as quick to fall to filling itself. We
now set the box down upon the wall and gently remove the cover.
The bee is head and shoulders in one of the half-filled cells, and is
oblivious to everything else about it. Come rack, come ruin, it will
die at work. We step back a few paces, and sit down upon the
ground so as to bring the box against the blue sky as a background.
In two or three minutes the bee is seen rising slowly and heavily
from the box. It seems loath to leave so much honey behind and
it marks the place well. It mounts aloft in a rapidly increasing
spiral, surveying the near and minute objects first, then the larger
and more distant, till having circled about the spot five or six times
and taken all its bearings it darts away for home. It is a good eye
that holds fast to the bee till it is fairly off. Sometimes one's head
will swim following it, and often one's eyes are put out by the sun.
This bee gradually drifts down the hill, then strikes away toward
a farm-house half a mile away, where I know bees are kept. Then
we try another and another, and the third bee, much to our satisfaction,
goes straight toward the woods. We could see the brown
speck against the darker background for many yards.
A bee will usually make three or four trips from the hunter's
box before it brings back a companion. I suspect the bee does not
tell its fellows what it has found, but that they smell out the secret;
it doubtless bears some evidence with it upon its feet or proboscis
that it has been upon honey-comb and not upon flowers, and its
companions take the hint and follow, arriving always many seconds
behind. Then the quantity and quality of the booty would also
betray it. No doubt, also, there are plenty of gossips about a hive
that note and tell everything. "Oh, did you see that? Peggy Mel
came in a few moments ago in great haste, and one of the up-stairs
packers says she was loaded till she groaned with apple-blossom
honey which she deposited, and then rushed off again like mad.
Apple blossom honey in October! Fee, fi, fo, fum! I smell something!
Let's after."
In about half an hour we have three well-defined lines of bees
established—two to farm-houses and one to the woods, and our
box is being rapidly depleted of its honey. About every fourth bee
goes to the woods, and now that they have learned the way thoroughly
they do not make the long preliminary whirl above the box,
but start directly from it. The woods are rough and dense and the
hill steep, and we do not like to follow the line of bees until we have
tried at least to settle the problem as to the distance they go into
the woods—whether the tree is on this side of the ridge or in the
depth of the forest on the other side. So we shut up the box when
it is full of bees and carry it about three hundred yards along the
wall from which we are operating. When liberated, the bees, as
they always will in such cases, go off in the same directions they
have been going; they do not seem to know that they have been
moved. But other bees have followed our scent, and it is not many
minutes before a second line to the woods is established. This is
called cross-lining the bees. The new line makes a sharp angle
with the other line, and we know at once that the tree is only a few
rods into the woods. The two lines we have established form
two sides of a triangle of which the wall is the base; at the apex of
the triangle, or where the two lines meet in the woods, we are sure
to find the trees. We quickly follow up these lines, and where they
cross each other on the side of the hill we scan every tree closely.
I pause at the foot of an oak and examine a hole near the root; now
the bees are in this tree and their entrance is on the upper side
near the ground, not two feet from the hole I peer into, and yet so
quiet and secret is their going and coming that I fail to discover
them and pass on up the hill. Failing in this direction, I return
to the oak again, and then perceive the bees going out in a small
crack in the tree. The bees do not know they are found out and
that the game is in our hands, and are as oblivious of our presence
as if we were ants or crickets. The indications are that the swarm
is a small one, and the store of honey trifling. In "taking up" a
bee-tree it is usual first to kill or stupefy the bees with the fumes of
burning sulphur or with tobacco smoke. But this course is impracticable
on the present occasion, so we boldly and ruthlessly assault
the tree with an axe we have procured. At the first blow the
bees set up a loud buzzing, but we have no mercy, and the side of
the cavity is soon cut away and the interior with its white-yellow
mass of comb-honey is exposed, and not a bee strikes a blow in defense
of its all. This may seem singular, but it has nearly always
been my experience. When a swarm of bees are thus rudely assaulted
with an axe, they evidently think the end of the world has
come, and, like true misers as they are, each one seizes as much of
the treasure as it can hold; in other words, they all fall to and gorge
themselves with honey, and calmly await the issue. When in this
condition they make no defense and will not sting unless taken hold
of. In fact they are as harmless as flies. Bees are always to be
managed with boldness and decision.
Any halfway measures, any timid poking about, any feeble attempts
to reach their honey, are sure to be quickly resented. The
popular notion that bees have a special antipathy toward certain
persons and a liking for certain others has only this fact at the bottom
of it; they will sting a person who is afraid of them and goes
skulking and dodging about, and they will not sting a person who
faces them boldly and has no dread of them. They are like dogs.
The way to disarm a vicious dog is to show him you do not fear
him; it is his turn to be afraid then. I never had any dread of
bees and am seldom stung by them. I have climbed up into a large
chestnut that contained a swarm in one of its cavities and chopped
them out with an axe, being obliged at times to pause and brush
the bewildered bees from my hands and face, and not been stung
once. I have chopped a swarm out of an apple-tree in June and
taken out the cards of honey and arranged them in a hive, and then
dipped out the bees with a dipper, and taken the whole home with
me in pretty good condition, with scarcely any opposition on
the part of the bees. In reaching your hand into the cavity to
detach and remove the comb you are pretty sure to get stung,
for when you touch the "business end" of a bee, it will sting even
though its head be off. But the bee carries the antidote to its own
poison. The best remedy for bee sting is honey, and when your
hands are besmeared with honey, as they are sure to be on such occasions,
the wound is scarcely more painful than the prick of a pin.
When a bee-tree is thus "taken up" in the middle of the day,
of course a good many bees are away from home and have not heard
the news. When they return and find the ground flowing with
honey, and piles of bleeding combs lying about, they apparently
do not recognize the place, and their first instinct is to fall to and
fill themselves; this done, their next thought is to carry it home,
so they rise up slowly through the branches of the trees till they
have attained an altitude that enables them to survey the scene,
when they seem to say, "Why, this is home" and down they come
again; beholding the wreck and ruins once more they still think
there is some mistake, and get up a second or a third time and then
drop back pitifully as before. It is the most pathetic sight of all,
the surviving and bewildered bees struggling to save a few drops
of their wasted treasures.
Presently, if there is another swarm in the woods, robber-bees
appear. You may know them by their saucy, chiding, devil-may-care
hum. It is an ill-wind that blows nobody good, and they
make the most of the misfortune of their neighbors; and thereby
pave the way for their own ruin. The hunter marks their course
and the next day looks them up. On this occasion the day was hot
and the honey very fragrant, and a line of bees was soon established
S.S.W. Though there was much refuse honey in the old stub,
and though little golden rills trickled down the hill from it, and
the near branches and saplings were besmeared with it where we
wiped our murderous hands, yet not a drop was wasted. It was a
feast to which not only honey-bees came, but bumble-bees, wasps,
hornets, flies, ants. The bumble-bees, which at this season are
hungry vagrants with no fixed place of abode, would gorge themselves,
then creep beneath the bits of empty comb or fragment of
bark and pass the night, and renew the feast next day. The bumble-bee
is an insect of which the bee-hunter sees much. There are all
sorts and sizes of them. They are dull and clumsy compared with
the honey-bee. Attracted in the fields by the bee-hunter's box,
they will come up the wind on the scent and blunder into it in the
most stupid, lubberly fashion.
The honey-bee that licked up our leavings on the old stub
belonged to a swarm, as it proved, about half a mile farther down
the ridge, and a few days afterward fate overtook them, and
their stores in turn became the prey of another swarm in the
vicinity, which also tempted Providence and were overwhelmed.
The first mentioned swarm I had lined from several points, and was
following up the clue over rocks and through gulleys, when I came
to where a large hemlock had been felled a few years before and a
swarm taken from a cavity near the top of it; fragments of the old
comb were yet to be seen. A few yards away stood another short,
squatty hemlock, and I said my bees ought to be there. As I
paused near it I noticed where the tree had been wounded with an
axe a couple of feet from the ground many years before. The wound
had partially grown over, but there was an opening there that I did
not see at the first glance. I was about to pass on when a bee
passed me making that peculiar shrill, discordant hum that a bee
makes when besmeared with honey. I saw it alight in the partially
closed wound and crawl home; then came others and others, little
bands and squads of them heavily freighted with honey from the
box. The tree was about twenty inches through and hollow at
the butt, or from the axe mark down. This space the bees had completely
filled with honey. With an axe we cut away the outer ring
of live wood and exposed the treasure. Despite the utmost care,
we wounded the comb so that little rills of the golden liquid issued
from the root of the tree and trickled down the hill.
The other bee-tree in the vicinity, to which I have referred, we
found one warm November day in less than half an hour after entering
the woods. It also was a hemlock, that stood in a niche in
a wall of hoary, moss-covered rocks thirty feet high. The tree
hardly reached to the top of the precipice. The bees entered a
small hole at the root, which was seven or eight feet from the ground.
The position was a striking one. Never did apiary have a finer
outlook or more rugged surroundings. A black, wood-embraced
lake lay at our feet; the long panorama of the Catskills filled the
far distance, and the more broken outlines of the Shawangunk
range filled the near. On every hand were precipices and a wild
confusion of rocks and trees.
The cavity occupied by the bees was about three feet and a half
long and eight or ten inches in diameter. With an axe we cut
away one side of the tree and laid bare its curiously wrought heart
of honey. It was a most pleasing sight. What winding and devious
ways the bees had through their palace! What great masses and
blocks of snow-white comb there were! Where it was sealed up,
presenting that slightly dented, uneven surface, it looked like some
precious ore. When we carried a large pail of it out of the woods,
it seemed still more like ore.
In lining bees through the woods, the tactics of the hunter are
to pause every twenty or thirty rods, lop away the branches or cut
down the trees, and set the bees to work again. If they still go forward,
he goes forward also and repeats his observations till the
tree is found or till the bees turn and come back upon the trail.
Then he knows he has passed the tree, and he retraces his steps to a
convenient distance and tries again, and thus quickly reduces the
space to be looked over till the swarm is traced home. On one
occasion, in a wild rocky wood, where the surface alternated between
deep gulfs and chasms filled with thick, heavy growths of timber
and sharp, precipitous, rocky ridges like a tempest-tossed sea,
I carried my bees directly under their tree, and set them to work
from a high, exposed ledge of rocks not thirty feet distant. One
would have expected them under such circumstances to have gone
straight home, as there were but few branches intervening, but they
did not; they labored up through the trees and attained an altitude
above the woods as if they had miles to travel, and thus baffled me
for hours. Bees will always do this. They are acquainted with
the woods only from the top side, and from the air above; they recognize
home only by landmarks here, and in every instance they
rise aloft to take their bearings. Think how familiar to them the
topography of the forest summits must be—an umbrageous sea
or plain where every mark and point is known.
Another curious fact is that generally you will get track of a
bee-tree sooner when you are half a mile from it than when you are
only a few yards. Bees, like us human insects, have little faith in
the near at hand; they expect to make their fortune in a distant
field, they are lured by the remote and the difficult, and hence overlook
the flower and the sweet at their very door. On several
occasions I have unwittingly set my box within a few paces of a
bee-tree and waited long for bees without getting them, when, on
removing to a distant field or opening in the woods I have got a
clue at once.
Bees, like the milkman, like to be near a spring. They do
water their honey, especially in a dry time. The liquid is then of
course thicker and sweeter, and will bear diluting. Hence, old
bee-hunters look for bee-trees along creeks and near spring runs
in the woods. I once found a tree a long distance from any water,
and the honey had a peculiar bitter flavor imparted to it, I was convinced,
by rain water sucked from the decayed and spongy hemlock
tree, in which the swarm was found. In cutting into the
tree, the north side of it was found to be saturated with water like
a spring, which ran out in big drops, and had a bitter flavor. The
bees had thus found a spring or a cistern in their own house.
Wild honey is as near like tame as wild bees are like their
brothers in the hive. The only difference is that wild honey is
flavored with your adventure, which makes it a little more delectable
than the domestic article.
Robert Louis Stevenson
What a monstrous specter is this man, the disease of the agglutinated
dust, lifting alternate feet or lying drugged with slumber;
killing, feeding, growing, bringing forth small copies of himself;
grown upon with hair like grass, fitted with eyes that move and
glitter in his face; a thing to set children screaming;—and yet
looked at nearlier, known as his fellows know him, how surprising
are his attributes! Poor soul, here for so little, cast among so many
hardships, filled with desires so incommensurate and so inconsistent,
savagely surrounded, savagely descended, irremediably condemned
to prey upon his fellow lives: who should have blamed him
had he been of a piece with his destiny and a being merely barbarous?
And we look and behold him instead filled with imperfect
virtues, infinitely childish, often admirably valiant, often
touchingly kind; sitting down, amidst his momentary life, to debate
of right and wrong and the attributes of the deity; rising up to
do battle for an egg or die for an idea; singling out his friends and
his mate with cordial affection; bringing forth in pain, rearing with
long-suffering solicitude, his young. To touch the heart of his
mystery, we find in him one thought, strange to the point of lunacy:
the thought of duty; the thought of something owing to himself, to
his neighbor, to his God; an ideal of decency, to which he would rise
if it were possible; a limit of shame, below which, if it be possible,
he will not stoop. The design in most men is one of conformity;
here and there, in picked natures, it transcends itself and soars on
the other side, arming martyrs with independence; but in all, in
their degrees, it is a bosom thought. It sways with so complete
an empire that merely selfish things come second, even with the
selfish: that appetites are starved, fears are conquered, pains supported;
that almost the dullest shrinks from the reproof of a glance,
although it were a child's; and all but the most cowardly stand
amidst the risks of war; and the more noble, having strongly conceived
an act as due to their ideal, affront and embrace death.
Strange enough if, with their singular origin and perverted practice,
they think they are to be rewarded in some future life: stranger
still, if they are persuaded of the contrary, and think this blow,
which they solicit, will strike them senseless for eternity. I shall
be reminded what a tragedy of misconception and misconduct
man at large presents: of organized injustice, cowardly violence,
and treacherous crime; and of the damning imperfections of the
best. They cannot be too darkly drawn. Man is indeed marked
for failure in his efforts to do right. But where the best consistently
miscarry, how tenfold more remarkable that all should continue to
strive; and surely we should find it both touching and inspiriting,
that in a field from which success is banished, our race should not
cease to labor.
If the first view of this creature, stalking in his rotatory isle, be
a thing to shake the courage of the stoutest, on this nearer sight
he startles us with an admiring wonder. It matters not where we
look, under what climate we observe him, in what stage of society,
in what depth of ignorance, burthened with what erroneous morality;
by campfires in Assiniboia, the snow powdering his shoulders,
the wind plucking his blanket, as he sits, passing the ceremonial
calumet and uttering his grave opinions like a Roman senator; in
ships at sea, a man inured to hardship and vile pleasures, his brightest
hope a fiddle in a tavern and a bedizened trull who sells herself
to rob him, and he for all that simple, innocent, cheerful, kindly
like a child, constant to toil, brave to drown, for others; in the
slums of cities, moving among indifferent millions to mechanical
employments, without hope of change in the future, with scarce
a pleasure in the present, and yet true to his virtues, honest up to
his lights, kind to his neighbors, tempted perhaps in vain by the
bright gin-palace, perhaps long-suffering with the drunken wife
that ruins him; in India (a woman this time) kneeling with broken
cries and streaming tears as she drowns her child in the sacred
river; in the brothel, the discard of society, living mainly
on strong drink, fed with affronts, a fool, a thief, the comrade of
thieves, and even here keeping the point of honor and the touch of
pity, often repaying the world's scorn with service, often standing
firm upon a scruple, and at a certain cost, rejecting riches: everywhere
some virtue cherished or affected, everywhere some decency
of thought and carriage, everywhere the ensign of man's ineffectual
goodness:—ah! if I could show you this! if I could show you these
men and women, all the world over, in every stage of history, under
every abuse of error, under every circumstance of failure, without
hope, without help, without thanks, still obscurely fighting the
lost fight of virtue, still clinging, in the brothel or on the scaffold,
to some rag of honor, the poor jewel of their souls!
It has been thought that the old Scotchman who said,
"A man's years are three score and ten, or maybe by good
hap he'll get ten more, but it's a weary wrastle all the way
through!" came to his final words as the result of writing outlines.
If this be true, surely it is unfortunate, for the writing
of outlines brings exceeding great reward. An outline is
not an ancient form of blind discipline, but rather a helping
hand across the bogland of facts and ideas. It is a most
useful instrument toward good writing; its justification is its
practical usefulness. This usefulness, helpfulness, is double
in its value—to the writer and to the instructor, when there
is one.
As to the value of an outline for the writer—without an
outline you face in your writing a complicated problem, more
complicated, in fact, than is justifiable. At one and the same
time you must make your thinking logical and your expression
adequate—distinguished if possible. Either of these
tasks is sufficient to demand all your powers; together, they
offer a really overwhelming problem. Stevenson, to whom
style was of the greatest importance, as bone of the bone and
blood of the blood of the writing, wrote to a friend, "Problems
of style are (as yet) dirt under my feet; my problem is
architectural, creative—to get this stuff joined and moving."
It was only after he had fitted his material together
that he felt able to devote himself to making the beautiful
prose that is so much admired. A noted Frenchman is
quoted as exclaiming, when first he beheld the famous Brooklyn
Bridge, "How beautiful it is!", then, "How well made
it is!" and finally, after a moment's reflection, "How well
planned it is!" A good piece of writing should have the same
comments made; but they cannot be made, usually, without
the carefully planned outline.
You face the problem, without an outline, of answering
the two questions about every detail that presents itself
for treatment: first, shall I include or exclude this detail;
and secondly, how shall I make this detail help the general
flow of my writing, and how shall I express it so that it shall
contribute to the proper tone of the work? And while you
thus judge each small detail, you must also keep your critical
faculties active to estimate your total course, whether
you are cleaving your way clearly, steadily, and with sufficient
directness to your goal, whether the work as a whole
is answering your desires.
Now to ask the unaided brain, unless it has had long years
of training, to perform all this critical work during the
actual process of expression, is nothing short of cruel—and
almost sure of failure. For in any writing which enlists
from you even a spark of interest the fervor of creative work,
the stimulating effect of seeing the work grow under your
pen, tends often to unseat the critical powers, to destroy perspective,
to make a detail seem more valuable or less valuable
than it should, on the whim of the momentary interest
or repulsion. Thus the logic of the writing is impaired, for
details are included which should not enter, and others are
excluded which ought to be welcomed, and proportions are
bad. And the expression is so liable to unevenness as to be
less worthy than it should be. Bad logic and uneven expression
beget failure.
The outline helps to overcome these difficulties. In the
first place, it is not final, can be changed at will, and makes
no extraordinary demands on the powers of expression. In
the second place, as regards logic, the outline shows the relation
of ideas to each other and to the whole subject; you
can estimate rather easily whether a detail is of sufficient
value to warrant inclusion, and, if so, how much space it
deserves. For in the outline you have the bare fact, succinctly
expressed, which enables you to focus your attention
upon the thought. But since logic is more than mere
inclusion and order and spacing, and deals also with the logic
of attitude, the outline is again of service. For it shows
what should be the tone of the complete piece of writing,
and how this tone should be modified by the individual
section of the writing. Suppose that you are to write of the
attitude of a politician toward party principles. If a heading
in your outline reads, "He never feared to modify principles
to meet inevitable conditions," the attitude which you
take in writing will be radically different from that which you
would assume if the heading read, "He never hesitated to
warp principles to outwit unfavorable conditions." Both
the logic of structure and that of attitude, then, are aided
by the use of an outline. And, at any point in the actual
completed writing, you can easily determine by referring to
the outline, whether you are gaining the effect that you desire
and what progress you have made. And in the third
place, as regards expression, the outline relieves you of the
necessity of doing the constructive thinking of the subject,
and enables you to apply all your powers to the actual saying
of your message. Shakespeare might have written, instead
of "the multitudinous seas incarnadine," "make all
the ocean, that's full of fishes,[9] look red"—but he did not.
Had he done so, where would now have been the power and
the charm? Expression is of utmost value, and you can
ill afford to slight it. For this reason, and especially since
distinguished expression is so difficult to form, to be released
from the attendant worry of constructive thinking is
of the greatest help to the writer. Both logic and expression,
then, are dependent on the outline: with it they are more
sure.
Instead, then, of feeling that dim dread of failure, which
ever dogs the writer's steps, with a well-constructed outline
you can feel comparative safety in the possession of a
safe guide in case of perplexity. You will be initiated, will
know the secrets of your subject, will have a "grip" with
your facts and ideas, and can apply your powers to putting
the intangible thoughts into tangible words.
As for being of value to the instructor, often he too can estimate
more surely and easily the worth of the writing if he
has the skeleton to examine. For there the structural defects
are more apparent, are not concealed by the pleasant flow
of words, just as the structure of a skyscraper is more apparent
before the wall-tiles or bricks are laid on to conceal the
girders. The instructor can therefore often point out insufficiencies
in the thought, or wrong relations, which might
otherwise stand as defects in the finished work.
Shall an outline be written in words and phrases or in complete
sentences? In the first place, so far as any reader except
the author is concerned, complete sentences are necessary
for understanding. Often they are necessary for the
writer himself. In an outline of a theme explaining gas engines
the isolated heading Speed means nothing definite to
any one but the author, if indeed to him. A reader cannot
tell from such a word whether speed is important or insignificant,
or whether the author intends to give to gas engines
credit for comparative excellence in this property. If, however,
the heading reads, "In the important property of
Speed gas engines are the equal of steam engines," the reader
knows at once what is meant, whether he may agree with
the statement or not. He can definitely tell from an outline
of complete sentences what the course of thought is to be
and what will be the tone of the theme. The reader, then,
needs complete sentences. The writer, on the other hand,
might seem to be sufficiently helped by mere words or
phrases, since he naturally knows what he means. But
does he know? The chances are that when an author puts
down such a heading as Speed he has only a large general
notion of what he means, without being sure of the immediate
connection and application, and with perhaps no idea
at all of the tone which he intends to catch. If the author
will write the sentence quoted above, he will complete his
thought, make it really definite, and be pretty sure to know
what he is talking about, what he intends to do. Furthermore,
even though he know, when he sets down a phrase,
what he means by it, the chance is strong that when he arrives
at the expansion of the phrase he will have forgotten
some of the implications and may give the heading a cast
that he did not intend. Whether he knows definitely what
he means or not, the writer is more safe if he uses complete
sentences, and for any other reader of the outline complete
sentences are quite necessary.
Outlines are of three kinds: those that show the topic relations
by division into indented headings; those that show
the sequence of paragraphs by statement of the topic sentence;
and those that combine these two forms. The primary
object of the first form, which is illustrated by the
first outline of "An Idyl of the Honey-Bee" which follows, is
to aid in the thinking, to plot out the ground and to group
the material. In this first outline a glance at the five main
headings makes the plan of the essay at once apparent—first
a statement of the effect of bees upon us; then an account
of a hunt; then some specific examples to drive things
home; then some special directions that might be overlooked,
and finally a tribute to the joy of the hunting. The benefit
of this kind of outline is that the general relationships among
topics are made clear, the large divisions of thought appear,
and the writer can with comparative ease tell whether he has
covered the subject, and whether he has chosen the best
order of thought. It avoids the invertebrate flow of thought
that is unaware of structure. In other words, it is of value
chiefly to the thinking. It does not show which topics shall
be grouped into paragraphs together, and it does not, of
course, phrase the topic sentences, usually. In such an outline
care should be taken to make each heading a complete
sentence, and to make headings that are of the same rank
fairly parallel in structure of expression unless this interferes
with the tone of the heading. For example, A, B, and
C under III are made similar in structure since they bear
the same general relation to III.
The second type of outline, that in which a list of the
topic sentences is given, and which is illustrated by the
second outline of "An Idyl of the Honey-Bee" which follows,
is of value, especially if used with an outline of the first
type, in that it shows just how much of the thought should
go into the various paragraphs, and thereby establishes the
divisions of expression. Comparison of the two outlines of
"An Idyl of the Honey-Bee" will show that paragraph 5
in the second outline includes all the material in the four
headings, 2, a, 1´, and b, under II in the first outline. Now
for the writer to know beforehand how he intends to divide
his material into paragraphs is of great value; otherwise he
might be giving to some comparatively minor point—which
for the moment assumes interest for him—a separate paragraph,
as if, for example, Mr. Burroughs had dwelt at
length on the interesting location of trees on ledges. In
other words, this second kind of outline is valuable chiefly
in its arrangement and placing of material. Its service in
making the original choice is not so immediately apparent.
It has also the advantage that it indicates pretty well what
kind of expression is to be used in the expanded form.
The third type of outline, which many writers prefer
to either of the others, indicates both the topics to be
treated and the division into paragraphs. It may be constructed
in either of two ways: first, the topic sentences may
be stated in their regular order, with the subdivisions of the
thought as they appear in the indented outline grouped under
the topic sentences; or in the indented outline the paragraphs
may be indicated by the regular sign for the paragraph
at any point where a new division is to be made.
That is, in the first of the two outlines that follow, the first
paragraph might be indicated in the first outline as including
I and I, A; the second as including II and II, A; the third as
including II, B, 1, a, b, etc. Or, in the second outline the
subheadings of the first might be indicated under the various
topic sentences. The value of this type of outline is obviously
that it both shows the logic of the thought and the
divisional arrangement for presentation in paragraphs.
With such an outline the chances that you could go wrong,
in even a long theme on a difficult subject, are slight.
Do not fail, therefore, when your theme is to be of any
considerable length, or when the subject is at all difficult,
to make an outline. There is no greater pleasure in the
world than that of creative effort when the creator knows
what he is about. But when the ideas are hazy, when the
writer does not know exactly what he wishes to do and what
impression he wishes to make—then the process of creation
is anything but pleasant. And since the outline presents
a pattern of your work, since with it you cannot fail
to see what your intentions are and what the requirements
of your subject, regard it as your best writing friend—and
make use of the rights of friendship and require service.
- A colony of bees increases our interest in a wood.
- The secret of the hidden golden store of honey is pleasing.
- The hunt is most interesting, especially in the autumn.
- Nature, as we tramp with luncheon and with bait, is in her greatest glory.
- We are stimulated by the odds against our finding the tree.
- Determining the direction of the tree is a problem.
- It is easy to catch the first bee and watch it devour the bait.
- But to be sure of its rapid flight home requires
sharp eyes and concentrated watching.
- Only after three or four trips of the first bee
do others discover the secret of our bait and
join in establishing the necessary "line" to
the tree.
- Determining the distance of the tree requires skill.
- From another point we make a new "line"
that meets the first at the tree.
- 1´. This is called "cross-lining."
- It is easy to pass by the tree even when we
know about where it is.
- Once found, the tree must be attacked boldly.
- Bees do not sting a bold person.
- But when a sting is touched, even on a dead bee, it hurts.
- Honey is the best cure for the sting.
-
The actions of the bees are interesting.
- Those which are away from home do not recognize
the ruins of their own hive, and begin to eat.
- At last they pathetically understand.
- Robber bees come for plunder.
- Bumble-bees arrive in large numbers.
- 1´. Compared with honey-bees they are clumsy.
- Two examples from experience show the chances for missing
and the delights of triumph.
- Both trees were hemlocks.
- Both were in interesting situations.
- Both yielded good store of honey.
- Special facts, occasioned by the habits of bees, need to be remembered.
- In the woods, the hunter must stop, every little while, to test his "line."
- Sometimes he is baffled, because the bees do not
know the woods from the ground side.
- Bees hunt for honey far from home.
- Usually it is easier to find a tree half a mile away
than from only a few yards.
- Since bees like water, a careful hunter looks along creeks and near springs.
- Wild honey is better than tame because it tastes of the adventure of finding it.
- The presence of a colony of bees in a wood gives it interest.
- The fall is the best time to start with luncheon and bait off
across the fields a-hunting.
- After two miles we catch several bees and watch them start
for home with our honey.
- After several trips, other bees that have discovered the secret arrive.
- With one line established, we move on, establish another, find
the tree and attack it.
-
Boldness in handling bees is essential.
- Bees that are away from home when their tree is attacked
have considerable difficulty in recognizing it.
- Robber bees join the plundered to eat all the remnants of honey.
- A neighbor honey-bee leads to another store in a hemlock.
- Another tree in the vicinity, also a hemlock, had a superb situation.
- The honey in this tree was most pleasing to see and to carry home.
- In lining bees one must stop every little while and test his line;
bees puzzle sometimes by their actions since they know the
woods only from above.
- Bees discover their home to the hunter better when they are
caught at some distance from the tree.
- Since bees like water, it is well to hunt along brooks and near
springs.
- Wild honey is sweeter than tame.
- Select the words and phrases in the selection from Pulvis et Umbra
which immediately help to accomplish the controlling purpose of
the essay.
- From what grade in the intellectual and social world does Stevenson
select his examples in the paragraph beginning: If the first view
of this creature, etc.? Why? From what grade would you select examples
for a similar paragraph if you intended the creation of despair
as your controlling purpose? What common qualities are found
in all Stevenson's examples through the selection? Why does he
strive for this quality?
- Make an outline of "An Idyl of the Honey-Bee," using the material
which now appears, but placing the accent of the essay upon
the difficulty of obtaining the honey, instead of upon the pleasures
of the hunt, as it is now placed—in other words, outline the essay
with change of controlling purpose.
- Write the first paragraph of the essay, and the last one, as you
would wish them to appear if your intention were to make difficulty
rather than joy the controlling purpose.
-
- Make an outline for "Solemn-Looking Blokes" with the controlling
purpose of bringing out the romantic nature of the presence
of American troops in England.
- Make an outline such as would suit the expression of an American
who had been living in England since the declaration of
war in 1914 and had been taunted with the apathy of the United
States government, and now was supremely proud to see United
States troops in England.
- Write a final paragraph of "Solemn-Looking Blokes" to express
any of the following controlling purposes:
- Joy at the union of the old and the new worlds in a common cause.
- Heartache at the awfulness of soldiers' sailing 3000 miles to
die because an autocratic government precipitated war.
- The pride of an American resident in London over the physique
of the United States soldiers.
- The astonishment of a London school-boy who has just read
in his history how the American colonies rebelled.
- The apprehension of a British Tory lest aristocracy be doomed
when the troops of a great democracy appear so far away from
home to battle against autocracy.
- Write outlines and themes on any of the following subjects to accomplish
the different controlling purposes:
- The Scientific Reduction of Noise.
- To show the social duty of engineers.
- To show the wonder of man's analytical powers.
- To show the seriousness of the difficulties that must be faced.
- The Growing Appreciation of Good Architecture in America.
- To show the good educative work of our architects.
- To show the influence of European travel.
- To show the effect of the general rise in standards of education.
- The Popular Magazines.
- To show the general looseness of thinking.
- To show the senseless duplication of material and ideas.
- To show the opportunity for a host of authors.
- The Effects of the Big Mail-Order Houses.
- To show how they ruin the small country store.
- To show how they increase the opportunities of the small buyers.
- To show how they help give employment in the large cities.
- Is Religion Declining?
- To show the shifting of responsibility from creeds to deeds.
- To show the changed status of the church.
- To show the effect of increased education on religion.
- "Best Sellers."
- To show the relation of their immediate popularity to their final valuation.
- To indicate the qualities necessary to a "best seller."
- To show the effect upon the thinking of a nation that has many "best sellers."
-
Results of the Farm Credit Legislation.
- To show the relief gained for the farmers.
- To show the effect on increased production.
- To show the fairer economic distribution.
- The Use of Concrete.
- To show the general economic value.
- To show the general lightening of toil that it may have caused.
- To show the variety of its service.
- The American Spirit.
- To show its idealism.
- To show its indebtedness to England, or France, or Germany.
- To show how it may help the world.
- Beethoven's Piano-forte Sonatas.
- To show them as the culmination of the sonata development.
- To show their romantic nature.
- To show the development of Beethoven's genius as he matured.
- Heredity in Plants.
- To show the similarity to heredity in man.
- To show how knowledge of heredity in plants may serve an economic purpose.
- To show the wonderful consistency of the laws of heredity in plants.
- Glacial Action in the Mississippi Valley.
- To show the economic result.
- To indicate the sweep of time consumed in the formation.
- To show the picturesque qualities in the gradual action.
- What is the controlling purpose in the following selection? Point
out the influence upon the writer of knowing that Bostonians would
read his words. Indicate how the selection would differ if the controlling
object were to be bitter jealousy expressed by a resident in a
newer, larger, envious city.
Boston has a rather old-fashioned habit of speaking the English
language. It came upon us rather suddenly one day as we journeyed
out Huntington Avenue to the smart new gray and red
opera house. The very coloring of the foyer of that house—soft
and simple—bespoke the refinement of the Boston of to-day.
In the Metropolitan Opera House, New York, in every other
one of the glib opera houses that are springing up mushroom-fashion
across the land, our ears would have been assailed by
"Librettos! Get your Librettos!" Not so in Boston. At the
Boston Opera House the young woman back of the foyer stand
calmly announced at clocklike intervals:
"Translations. Translations."
And the head usher, whom the older Bostonians grasped by the
hand and seemed to regard as a long-lost friend, did not sip out,
"Checks, please."
"Locations," he requested, as he condescended to the hand-grasps
of the socially elect.
"The nearer door for those stepping out," announces the guard
upon the elevated train, and as for the surface and trolley-cars,
those wonderful green perambulators laden down with more signs
than nine ordinary trolley-cars would carry at one time, they do
not speak of the newest type in Boston as "Pay-as-you-enter-cars,"
after the fashion of less cultured communities. In the Hub
they are known as Prepayment cars—its precision is unrelenting.[10]
- What is the controlling purpose in the following selection from Mr.
John Masefield's volume of Gallipoli? Analyze this controlling purpose
as to the subject itself, the author's personal reaction, and the
intended readers—largely perhaps, the American people.
Let the reader imagine himself to be facing three miles of any
very rough broken sloping ground known to him, ground for the
most part gorse-thyme-and-scrub-covered, being poor soil, but
in some places beautiful with flowers (especially a "spiked yellow
flower with a whitish leaf") and on others green from cultivation.
Let him say to himself that he and an army of his friends are about
to advance up the slope towards the top, and that as they will be
advancing in a line, along the whole length of the three miles, he
will only see the advance of those comparatively near to him,
since folds or dips in the ground will hide the others. Let him,
before he advances, look earnestly along the line of the hill, as it
shows up clear, in blazing sunlight only a mile from him, to see
his tactical objective, one little clump of pines, three hundred yards
away, across what seem to be fields. Let him see in the whole
length of the hill no single human being, nothing but scrub, earth,
a few scattered buildings, of the Levantine type (dirty white
with roofs of dirty red) and some patches of dark Scotch pine,
growing as the pine loves, on bleak crests. Let him imagine himself
to be more weary than he has ever been in his life before, and
dirtier than he has ever believed it possible to be, and parched
with thirst, nervous, wild-eyed and rather lousy. Let him think
that he has not slept for more than a few minutes together for
eleven days and nights, and that in all his waking hours he has
been fighting for his life, often hand to hand in the dark with a
fierce enemy, and that after each fight he has had to dig himself a
hole in the ground, often with his hands, and then walk three or
four roadless miles to bring up heavy boxes under fire. Let him
think, too, that in all those eleven days he has never for an instant
been out of the thunder of cannon, that waking or sleeping their
devastating crash has been blasting the air across within a mile
or two, and this from an artillery so terrible that each discharge
beats as it were a wedge of shock between the skull-bone and the
brain. Let him think too that never, for an instant, in all that
time, has he been free or even partly free from the peril of death in
its most sudden and savage forms, and that hourly in all that time
he has seen his friends blown to pieces at his side, or dismembered,
or drowned, or driven mad, or stabbed, or sniped by some unseen
stalker, or bombed in the dark sap with a handful of dynamite
in a beef-tin, till their blood is caked upon his clothes and thick
upon his face, and that he knows, as he stares at the hill, that in
a few moments, more of that dwindling band, already too few,
God knows how many too few, for the task to be done, will be
gone the same way, and that he himself may reckon that he has
done with life, tasted and spoken and loved his last, and that in a
few minutes more may be blasted dead, or lying bleeding in the
scrub, with perhaps his face gone and a leg and an arm broken, unable
to move but still alive, unable to drive away the flies or screen
the ever-dropping rain, in a place where none will find him, or
be able to help him, a place where he will die and rot and shrivel,
till nothing is left of him but a few rags and a few remnants
and a little identification-disc flapping on his bones in the wind.
Then let him hear the intermittent crash and rattle of the fire
augment suddenly and awfully in a roaring, blasting roll, unspeakable
and unthinkable, while the air above, that has long been
whining and whistling, becomes filled with the scream of shells
passing like great cats of death in the air; let him see the slope of
the hill vanish in a few moments into the white, yellow, and black
smokes of great explosions shot with fire, and watch the lines of
white puffs marking the hill in streaks where the shrapnel searches
a suspected trench; and then, in the height of the tumult, when
his brain is shaking in his head, let him pull himself together with
his friends, and clamber up out of the trench, to go forward against
an invisible enemy, safe in some unseen trench expecting him.[11]
What light does the following paragraph which appears at the beginning
of the book throw upon the controlling purpose?
Later, when there was leisure, I began to consider the Dardanelles
Campaign, not as a tragedy, nor as a mistake, but as a great
human effort, which came, more than once, very near to triumph,
achieved the impossible many times, and failed, in the end, as
many great deeds of arms have failed, from something which had
nothing to do with arms nor with the men who bore them. That
the effort failed is not against it; much that is most splendid in
military history failed, many great things and noble men have
failed. To myself, this failure is the second grand event of the
war; the first was Belgium's answer to the German ultimatum.[12]
- Explain what would be your controlling purpose in a theme on any
of the following subjects, and how you would arrange your material
to accomplish this purpose.
- What is the Primary Function of a Successful Novel?
- The Philosophy of Woman Suffrage.
- Lynch Law and Law Reform.
- The Conservatism of the American College Student.
- Intellectual Bravery.
- A Mediæval Free City.
- Mr. Roosevelt's Career as an Index of the American Character.
- Practical Efficiency as an Enemy to "Sweetness and Light."
- The Æsthetics of the Skyscraper.
- Possibilities for the Small Farmer in America.
- The Future of Civil Engineering.
- Housekeeping as an Exact Science.
- Indicate what your controlling purpose would be in writing of the
following subjects, if you chose your purpose from the subject-matter
alone. Then show how the purpose might be affected by the different
sets of readers as they are indicated in the subheadings.
- The Intelligence of the Average Voter.
- For a woman who eagerly desires woman suffrage.
- For a refined but narrow aristocrat, descendant of an old family.
- For an agitating member of the I.W.W.
- The Value of Courses in Literature for the Technical Student.
- For a hard-headed civil engineer.
- For a white-haired, kindly old professor of Greek, who resents
the intrusion of science and labor.
- For a mother who wants her son to "get everything good
from his technical course."
- The Delights of Fishing.
- For a woman who cannot understand why her husband
wants to be always going on silly fishing trips.
- For a group of city men who are devotees of the sport.
- For a small boy who hopes some day to go with "Dad" on his trips.
- The Value of the Civic Center.
- For a man who resents the extra taxation that would be
necessary to make one in his city.
- For a prominent, public-spirited architect.
-
For a young woman graduate from college who eagerly
desires to "do something" for her city.
- The Spirit of the "Middle West," the "Old South" or any
other section of the country.
- For a proud resident.
- For a sniffy resident of another section.
- For a person who has never thought of such a thing.